I couldn’t find a boat 

To take me 'oer to east egg

Couldn’t cross the water 

not by my own two legs

I told myself I couldn't  swim 

but I couldn’t see the way

How do you chase a faint green light 

When the lights  

don’t shine your way

I tried living for today

But then tomorrow came

And then everything that was 
was never the same

I love this!!!  My PS4 won't play soundcloud for some reason so I haven't heard it yet, but I really like your style of writing!!!  I'm currently in the process of re-modeling my studio so I'll definitely have a listen soon! Great job!! ? 

Another really good one, Rhys. The atmospheric production goes very well with the lyrics too. I like this less hurried version of you!

One suggestion - you could go up with your voice at the end of the first line of the chorus. It would set it apart from the melody of the verse a bit more. Same with the fifth line.

I tried living for toDAY

But then tomorrow came

And everybody left and left

Me lonely yesterday

So I lived for yesterDAY

Until I watched it float away

And as the days passed one by one

I felt my memories fade

away like snow in May

Just a suggestion that may or may not help. I love it as it is.

Hey, thanks for the feedback, folks! Sorry about the slow reply, construction season just started so I’ve actually been busy! 😛 Japov, glad ya like the lyrics, hope ya enjoy the tune once ya get the chance to hear it! Gavin, thanks for the kind words, much appreciate it! I’m finding that rushing less is actually making it more fun to record, and so far I’m happy with the progress, glad to hear ya feel the same way. I like the idea of going higher on the first bar of the chorus, I’ll give it a go but I’m not sure if it’ll push my range too far. Definitely isn’t my easiest one to sing as is! But if I can manage I’ll do that, definitely would help. Thanks again folks, hope y’all’re having a good week. Cheers

There was some noise in your recording. Not sure if it was sound cloud or what? And you didn't always follow your posted lyrics. BUT, for a "metaphor" song, it is very well written! The message seems to be, not only can you not live in yesterday,  but you need to be ready to move on to tomorrow, or your going to be living in vein.

Enjoyed it. Trying to listen through some of the noise, I also liked your rhythm and melody. Very well done!

phil

Hey Phil, thanks for the feedback! As far as the noise, I’m not really sure but I’m pretty sure the backing vocs are out of time in spots and pretty muddy, so maybe it’s that? I’m honestly not sure. As far as the lyrics, sorry ‘bout that. I tend to go back and forth between tinkering the audio and written versions, and don’t always update them together. I’ll fix it at some point, hopefully it wasn’t a big issue. As far as the rest of it, thanks man! What you’re saying with the theme is pretty much spot on. In the narrative, it’s presented literally as though you can return to the past, but I planned that as sort of a red herring. If you’re familiar with it, it’s almost antithetical to John Mayer’s “Walt Grace’s Submarine Test, January 1967” (easily my all-time favourite tune.) In that song the protagonist, I assume, dies but still accomplishes his impossible goal. This is supposed to present as someone achieving their impossible dream, only to find themselves not only accomplishing the thing that was really just supposed to be a suicide mission, only to be faced with the cold fact that their dream was a delusion, and the reality was just the loss of hope. So basically the conclusion is you can relive the past in your head, but you can’t physically get there and if you try all you’ll do is loss hope in tomorrow. Anyways, sorry if I’m droning on. Thanks for onenting, glad ya liked the lyrics! Cheers 

Well Rhys, I am now. I listened to (most of) the song on YouTube. Then, I followed the links to listen to a few more John Mayer songs. To be honest, I had never heard him before. He strikes me as a second generation John Prine (which by the way, I also only found about 5-6 years ago). To me, his songs sound a little more Americana, but more in the "pop-folk" style. His lyrics are more story, like folk, but his chord choices and melody are more pop.

I guess I've spent too many years immersed in the "current country" sound, as it has changed from the 70's until now. So, all my songs tried to sound "current country". Now that I've decided to branch out of that genre, thanks for introducing me to John! In fact, I kept listening to him, and now he's singing, "I'm gonna find another you", which is more B.B. King blues. Which I also love! He is very talented!

phil

Well, I've listened to even more John Mayer. I think I'll reclassify him as "pop-Americana"? He really does have a lot of different songs. But the more I listened, the less I found that were "story" songs. He is just so good and talented, it really doesn't matter how you classify his music. And he certainly has a huge following it looks like. If you wanted to start a career of being a touring artist, he would be a great one to aspire too.

phil