Hey AllfortheLord,

There are some folks here who would argue that you should never write a downbeat song, but always focus on happy thoughts because that's what people like to hear. I'm not 100% in that camp, but I think that if we are to sympathize with the singer we maybe need to know a bit more about why he/she is unhappy. What has happened to make him/her feel this way?

I thought the reasons for being blue were quite clear.  Stuck in a small town.  Going nowhere in life.  The call of a bigger town or city is drawing them out but the very change that is craved is also feared.

I didn't get through the first chorus before tears came to my eyes. It's a heart breaking chorus.

One way to judge a lyric is how well it captures a mood or expresses a feeling. Check the box mate.

Improvements??? The only thing that jumps out at me is the use of the word "game." It strikes me as a rhyme of convenience rather than a word choice that communicates exactly what you want to communicate there. 

Jen

Dclose answers that to a tee 

there were several choices and since life is a game, I left it with that  choice, can easily change that when it comes time to record

coulda said better gain or better change or etc

There's a life out on that horizon beckoning me

And a voice in my head screaming I've got to be free... 

I wouldn't never use those words in talkin to someone, I only use the same type words in my songs as I would in life and horizon or beckoning ain't ones I'd use maybe you talk like this? not me 

I think this is great. I love the title. It definitely made me click on the thread to see what it was all about. I guess that's what you want in a song title, someone to be curious enough to check it out.

It's a songwriting site AFTL... Just sharing what popped into my head 🙂 

thanks yes 1 of them is curiosity( you must seperate yourself from the rest be unique)

I'm jus being truthful to what I said

Interesting point about the song title. It has occurred to me that in the age of clicking on things, a distinctive title has become more important. That's why I sometimes go totally against conventional wisdom and even use titles that might describe the song but don't actually occur anywhere in it, just because they are more interesting and intriguing. "Bluer than a field of bluebonnets" is definitely an interesting title.

it doesn't hurt havin a catchy title but if ya ain't gottem drawn in after 15 secs of it  more than likekly they'll mo veor or go to suggesting stuff 

Well, yes, of course. It's no good getting people to click on something that's no good and doesn't draw them in.