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22/03/2019 3:47 pm
One day
Intro
Making a living loving.
She’s a working girl.
If you show her the money
She’ll give you a whirl.
Verse
He gave her hope he gave her coke
Made her a slave of the trade.
She makes her living from loving
Sells what she one gave away.
Chorus
She got busted and they booked her
It wasn’t in the cards.
Kept on dreaming, kept on dreaming
One day she’d be a star.
Verse
She met a man he took her hand
Gave her a role in a show.
He changed her life made her his wife
These days she doesn’t need blow.
Chorus
She got busted and they booked her
It wasn’t in the cards.
Kept on dreaming, kept on dreaming
One day she’d be a star.
Bridge
She may not be a big star
But she’s found a way to shine.
You can see her weekday nights.
She anchors the news at nine.
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Kept on dreaming, kept on dreaming
One day she’d be a star.
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22/03/2019 4:18 pm
Thanks!
carroll kiphen
23/03/2019 5:16 pm
Good "turn around" there in the bridge! Was afraid it would be all negative. One suggestions though would be to reword the first two verses to make them past tense so they flow with the chorus, third verse, and bridge. Also, in the bridge you say she might "not" be a star, but she anchors the news at nine. Some might call a news anchor being a star.
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