you can't have all happy songs where everything ends up with a full cherry bowl, hasta be a balance and cheatin songs were and still are popular, but thanks for your opinion , it'll be filed in the appropriate place

Piq gave an honest opinion. I think responding in the way you did might discourage others from doing the same. I also think that he makes a point worth considering, if you were wanting to pitch it. In that case, the singer is the customer, and he is likely to prefer songs that make him look good, portray him in a positive light, especially to the women who make up most of the buying public. I'm not speaking as an expert - I've never sold a song - but that is the conventional wisdom, and it seems to make sense to me.

None of this makes it a bad song. It's more of a marketing consideration than an artistic one and, of course, if you are going to sing it yourself or already have someone interested, it doesn't really apply. Having said that, personally, I don't think it's one of your strongest lyrics, firstly because the underlying idea of colored tears seems a little forced, especially in the line "but these colored tears I shed, flow from a heart of lead," and secondly because I can't sympathize with the narrator. "I feel bad that I've lost her, but not for what I've done - hell, I'd do it again." Also, he has both a mistress and a series of one night stands, so he's cheating on her too.

This is just my opinion, offered in a spirit of trying to be helpful.

I have sold songs several under contract as we speak and he has every right to voice his opinion as I do, and cheating songs are very big in the  tradional country . Heck if we did it it his way then most of the famous legends wouldn't have hit songs about two timing cheating etc example Loretta Lynn, Moe Bandy, George Jones, Hank williams Sr etc, do ya get my drift?

show me where in your own words  where the constructive critisim is? your wantin me to make MY SONG into what you consider a good song to be below is your words, I want keep goin back and forth on this with you or anyone else 

tbh , i dont know who in their right mind , would wanna sing this . to me , it just comes across as some cheating / phillandering guy who wants people to feel sorry for him , when really its his wife that deserves our pity . in my opinion it needs a major rewrite , to make the singer / character more likeable

ok pig you write a verse that makes him more likeable  and I will look at it, that's fair no more words show me some action

good just stay away from my lyrics 

WOW...it's posts like these that kill forums

>>A simple...thanks for your input. I've considered your point (and am moving on.)

Note to allforthelord...go third person He and She

Posted by: NEIL COTTON

Note to allforthelord...go third person He and She

see now that's a great idea, and will use it because it keeps everything the same but different

Now red was the color in his lady's eyes

Now red was the color in his lady's eyes

Blue was her heart as she packed tp leave