Hey man, dropped in to listen and offer some feedback (mostly because of a dm I accidentally got), and.... uhh... I've got nothing. Beautiful effort with emotional honesty that hits really hard. Brilliant. I'm sorry for your loss dude 🙁 Thanks for taking on one of the hardest subjects out there, I think you did an amazing job

Hello Rhys, Thanks for taking a listen and Thank you for your comment, it was much appreciated.  Best wishes,

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Lots of emotional intensity. I went through the same thing about 20 years ago when a close friend committed suicide. And given that emotional depth that really comes through in your performance and the personal struggle that you're facing, it's difficult to give a critique without making it sound heartless. So before I provide one, let me say that this is coming from a good place and not meant to knock you down at all.

The only real "problem" I see is in the third verse/bridge. Whereas with the previous two verses that revolve around single subject, in the third, you've got three competing subjects: 1) Lord, you know me; 2) I'm having a hard believing; 3) I'm so broken, I'm considering pulling a trigger on myself.

The second verse speaks to your own personal strength, so I don't believe you'd actually take your life, but that said, perhaps you might consider just focusing on one thing. Personally, I'd focus on the second item and how it's hard to believe in the Lord considering what has happened. Then tie it back into how only the Lord can mend your broken heart.

There's no denying how heartfelt your performance of this song is. I wish you all the best and will say a prayer for you!

Hello Brendan, Thank you for the listen, and Thank you for your reply.  I originally wrote the last four lines of the second repeat to read;

You know this one really put me down,
take my finger from this trigger.
Only you can mend a wounded heart,
that's so broken.

For what ever reason, I opted to go with the full repeat as is, I don't know if it would have made any difference.  Again, Thank you for the listen and the comments and advice.  Best wishes,

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Well written and well done. Simplicity is always a winner.

Just one little remark: I would shorten it by putting the interlude right after the 2nd verse-refrain and sing the 3rd verse-refrain and finish with the tag.

Very good song.

Hello Guy, Thank you for taking a listen and leaving a comment.  Thank you for the suggestion, I will give it a try.  Best wishes,

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