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Gary E. Andrews
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Cathy Heller of Catch The Moon Music advises, "Give yourself permission to be messy."
I think that's good advice when you ad lib Lyric.
Sing something and see if it sings well, and makes sense too. See if what comes out of your mouth suggests a story you'd like to hear more of.
Sometimes that first Line is just a beginning. It may introduce the Singer-Character with a pronoun, 'I'. It may imply the Singer-Character by conversational nature, addressing himself/herself to communicate 'with' another character, with the pronoun 'you'. That's a direct First-Person form of conversation.
The Singer-Character may address him/herself to the listener, telling us about someone else; the pronoun 'she' or 'he'.
That can happen in Line 1 of Verse I, if you start with a Verse. Some Songs start with the Chorus. Those character 'creations' can happen whatever form you choose.
You are the first listener. You make judgment calls about how the 'conversation' is going to go, who's talking to whom.
Here's a Song idea that came to me in a dream. I've been in a 'fallow' period, not writing, but this dream made me want a Song out of it. Before my judgmental faculties came fully awake, I gave myself permission to be messy, and wrote some Verses, led to the Chorus idea from the dream, did some editing, and a 'final' Re-Write. I enjoyed seeing it evolve as much as enjoying the finished product.
Here's what I remembered of the dream when I woke up:

In a dream I'm walking into a long room carrying my guitar in a case.
A drummer is set up in the back, beyond a circle of couches and armchairs.
A guitar player is laid back on one of the couches, on the left, guitar in hand.
The drummer is saying to the guitar player, "Well play somethin'!"
I sit down with my back to the drummer, take out my guitar, start playin' E7 and A7, singing, "Taste! Taste of love! Taste! Taste of love!"
I woke up, and played the Chorus and wrote the rest to go with it. There were 'edits' during the writing, words/Lines I tried, ad lib, and modified or rejected. And the editing, 're-writing' continues even days or weeks later.
 
"After The Taste Of Love" Copyright March 16, 2021.
By Gary E. Andrews. All Rights Reserved For The Globe.
E7 O2213O
A7 XO2O2O XO2O23
B7 O212O2
 
Nobody warned me, about your kiss.
Nobody told me, how much I would miss,
the look in your eye, the feel of your lips,
After The Taste Of Love!
My buddy told me you could set me on fire.
Nobody warned me love could be a liar.
Nobody knows the depths of desire,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
More of the same's all I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
I know you tol' me not to get this started.
You said we could both end up broken-hearted!
I felt the pain in the moment we parted,
After The Taste Of Love!
We got entangled in your twenty questions!
I fell like a fool who never learns his lesson.
Kicked out of school, I came back messin',
After The Taste Of Love!
 
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
More of the same's all I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
I kissed the Gypsy twice before I paid her!
She said, "You come on like a pirate raider!
I said, "Baby can't we talk about this later,
After The Taste Of Love!
After The Taste Of Love!
After The Taste Of Love!
 
 
EDITING:
"After The Taste Of Love" Copyright March 16, 2021.
By Gary E. Andrews. All Rights Reserved For The Globe.

Nobody warned me, about your kiss.
Nobody told me, how much I would miss,
the look in your eye, the feel of your lips,
After The Taste Of Love!
The Gypsy told me, you could set me on fire!
I didn't believe her! I called her a liar!
How could I know, the depths of desire,
After The Taste Of Love?

Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
More of the same's all I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!

I know you tol' me, not to get this started.
You said we could both, end up broken-hearted!
I felt the pain, in the moment we parted,
After The Taste Of Love!
We got entangled, in your twenty questions!
I fell like a fool, who never learns his lesson.
Kicked out of school, I came back messin',
After The Taste Of Love!

Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
More of the same's all I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!

I kissed the Gypsy, twice before I paid her!
She said, "You come on, like a pirate raider!
I said, "Baby, can't we talk about this later,
After The Taste Of Love?
After The Taste Of Love!
After The Taste Of Love!

 

A Re-Write, to simplify. March 19, 2021.

"After The Taste Of Love" Copyright March 16, 2021.
By Gary E. Andrews. All Rights Reserved For The Globe.
E7 O2213O
A7 XO2O2O  XO2O23  XO2223
B7 O212O2
 
Nobody warned me, about your kiss.
Nobody told me, how much I would miss,
the look in your eye, the feel of your lips,
After The Taste Of Love!
The Gypsy told me, you could set me on fire!
I wouldn't believe her! I called her a liar!
How could I know the depths of desire,
After The Taste Of Love?
 
Taste! A taste of love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! A taste of love!
More of the same is all, I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
The Gypsy told me not to get this started.
She said we could both end up broken-hearted!
I felt a pain, in the moment we parted,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
Taste! A taste of love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! A taste of love!
More of the same is all, I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
I kissed the Gypsy, twice before I paid her!
She said, "You come on like a pirate raider!"
I said, "Baby, can't we talk about this later,
After The Taste Of Love?
After The Taste Of Love!
After The Taste Of Love!

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Another edit, to make it all about the Gypsy, instead of her as an 'Other-Woman, third party Character. March 23, 2021.

"After The Taste Of Love" Copyright March 16, 2021.
By Gary E. Andrews. All Rights Reserved For The Globe.
E7 O2213O
A7 XO2O2O  XO2O23  XO2223
B7 O212O2
 
Nobody warned me, 'bout the Gypsy's kiss.
Nobody told me, how much I would miss,
the look in her eye, the feel of her lips,
After The Taste Of Love!
The Gypsy told me, she could set me on fire!
I wouldn't believe her! I called her a liar!
How could I know the depths of desire,
After The Taste Of Love?
 
Taste! A taste of love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! A taste of love!
More of the same is all, I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
The Gypsy told me, not to get this started.
She said we could both end up broken-hearted!
I felt a pain, in the moment we parted,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
Taste! A taste of love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! A taste of love!
More of the same is all, I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
I kissed the Gypsy, twice before I paid her!
She said, "You come on like a pirate raider!"
I said, "Baby, can't we talk about this later,
After The Taste Of Love?
After The Taste Of Love!
After The Taste Of Love!

Yet another Edit, Re-Write is down the page here. 

Despite 1,000's of years of Songwriting humans have not exhausted the possibilities. There will always be another Song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? www.garyeandrews.com


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(Here's another one, with some of the in-process editing or re-writing. First, the version I worked with, moving forward.

"She's A Hanger On" copyright April 12, 2021 by Gary E. Andrews.

 
She's A Hanger On.
I let her hang around.
She's as good as gone.
She's never let me down. (I started with "She's never let me down" and tried "You know she's never let me down.")
She's a Hanger On.
I like having her around.

She's a white gold girl.
She got silver everywhere.
She's a righteous girl.
It's not as good when she's not there.
She's A Hanger On.
I like having her around. (I kept repeating this Line, but thought Verses II and III should have their own Line, keeping with the Rhyme-Scheme.)
(Later I tried, "I like her enough to share" and "She likes me well enough to share" and "Ones like her are rather rare", but wasn't satisfied with those Lines.)

She's that kind of girl,
like you hear about in songs,
from a different world.
Somehow tonight she got it wrong.
She's A Hanger On.
I like having her around. 
 
She's A Hanger On.
I let her hang around.

(Then I found Lines I liked, in the Rhyme-Scheme, and coherent (If that word applies to a somewhat poetically vague Lyric) in the theme or storyline.)
"She's A Hanger On" copyright April 12, 2021 by Gary E. Andrews.

E7 O2213O
A7 XO2221
B7 O212O2

She's A Hanger On.
I let her hang around.
She's as good as gone.
I know she's never let me down.
She's a Hanger On.
I like having her around.

She's a white gold girl.
She got silver everywhere.
She's a righteous girl.
It's not as good when she's not there.
She's A Hanger On.
She's a little worse for wear.

She's that kind of girl,
like you hear about in songs,
from a different world.
Somehow tonight she got it wrong.
She's A Hanger On.
She's right where she belongs.

She's A Hanger On.
I let her hang around.
She's as good as gone.
I know she's never let me down.
She's a Hanger On.
I like having her around.

She's A Hanger On.
I let her hang around.

(You can't hear this one, but you can hear others at www.garyeandrews.com )
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Another edit. I simply got confused while singing the last Verse about who did what, and switched it to give the Gypsy Character the 'aggressor' role.
And I liked it. It's as if the Singer-Character has worn down her resistance and now she desires him as he does her.

Another edit, to make it all about the Gypsy, instead of her as an 'Other-Woman, third party Character. June 12, 2021.

"After The Taste Of Love" Copyright March 16, 2021.
By Gary E. Andrews. All Rights Reserved For The Globe.
E7 O2213O
A7 XO2O2O  XO2O23  XO2223
B7 O212O2
E O221OO
(Verse I)
Nobody warned me, 'bout the Gypsy's kiss.
Nobody told me, how much I would miss,
the look in her eye, the feel of her lips,
(Chorus Refrain)
After The Taste Of Love!
(Verse II)
The Gypsy told me, she could set me on fire!
I wouldn't believe her! I called her a liar!
How could I know the depths of desire,
After The Taste Of Love?
(Bridge)
Taste! A taste of love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! The taste of love!
More of the same is all, I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!
(Verse III)
The Gypsy told me, not to get this started.
She said we could both end up broken-hearted!
I felt a pain, in the moment we parted,
After The Taste Of Love!
 
Taste! A taste of love!
Taste! I want a taste of your love!
Taste! A taste of love!
More of the same is all, I can think of,
After The Taste Of Love!
(Coda)
The Gypsy kissed me, twice before I paid her!
I said, "You come on like a pirate raider!"
She said, "Uh, Baby, can't we talk about this later,
After The Taste Of Love?
After The Taste Of Love!
After The Taste Of Love!

 

Despite 1,000's of years of Songwriting humans have not exhausted the possibilities. There will always be another Song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? www.garyeandrews.com


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