I hear it as a blues tune. What were you thinking?

Me thinking. Clunk , clunk , grind shudder. Really don't know. Wish i could imagine them with a melody! Sure would help.

If you'd like to learn to write a melody and you're not a musician, I'd recommend picking a genre (any genre), finding your favourite tune in the genre, then singing your lyrics to that tune. Play around with how the words fit to that song, where to sustain a word, where to clip it. Then, you can start adding some variation to the melody. Or, if you're not feeling confident to add variation, go find another tune and sing it to that tune. You certainly don't want your melody to sound like your favourite song, but it's a way to get your mind thinking about melody.

J

I'll give it a shot.

That's great C. Good luck. ?

Verse

Eden was a thriving garden.

it Was the birthplace of sin.

Nobody locked the garden gate.

And satan jus slithered in.

Pre chorus

He offered first bite to Eve.

Said come enjoy the fruit.

She handed it over to Adam

And sin grew it's first root.

Chorus

It tasted sweet they loved it.

Although it brought them woe.

God banished them from Eden

As sin began to grow.

Verse

Mankind was a barren meadow

For the planting of sin.

Sunny days and pleasant weather

Were just about to end.

Pre chorus

The devil planted evil.

Yes Eve was so naive.

God banished them from heaven

And sin grew its first leaves.

Chorus

It tasted sweet they loved it

Although it brought them woe.

God banished them from Eden.

Roots began to grow.

Yeah i like satan slithered in.

If you go with "Satan slithered," you can make the singer's and sound engineer's job a whole lot easier if the melody doesn't rush over those lines. If the melody requires the singer to rush through those lines, you'll just end up with a sibilant mess. It's a great line. Just keep sibilance in mind when you write the melody.

Cheers

if ya don't like slithered maybe try ambled

• No slithered sounds better

Ha! Slithered is great. Just talking about melody development from a singer's/producer's p.o.v. It's easy enough to perform if the melody is sympathetic to the potential for the Ssss to become overbearing.

Roots

Verse

Eden was a fertile garden.

Was the birthplace of sin.

Nobody locked the garden gate

So Satan slithered in.

Pre chorus

He offered a bite to Eve

Said come enjoy the fruit.

She handed it to Adam.

Sin sprouted its first root.

Chorus

It tasted sweet they loved it

Though it brought them woe.

God banished them from Eden.

Roots began to grow.

Verse

Mankind was a fallow meadow.

Ripe for planting sin.

Sunny days and pleasant weather

Were about to end.

Pre chorus

This poison would take its toll.

Brought god’s wrath raining down.

Evil took root in the garden

It tainted holy ground.

Chorus

It tasted sweet they loved it

Though it brought them woe.

God banished them from Eden.

Roots began to grow.

Bridge

In every field, every forest and meadow

It spread all around the world.

The fruit of desire’s the ruin of mankind

All thanks to one foolish girl.

Verse

Eden was a fertile garden.

Was the birthplace of sin.

Nobody locked the garden gate

So Satan slithered in.

Pre chorus

He offered a bite to Eve

Said come enjoy the fruit.

She handed it to Adam.

Sin sprouted its first root.

Chorus

It tasted sweet they loved it

Though it brought them woe.

God banished them from Eden.

Roots began to grow.