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ckiphen
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12/06/2019 8:23 am  

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Forged in the fire of war.

Emerged a man of steel.

Hardened by his hatred.

He no longer feels.

Pre Chorus

He's closed the curtains to the world.

Won't let the light shine in.

He lives alone with shadows.

Talks aloud to dead men.

Chorus

He comrades won't desert him.

They're with him all the time.

A marine keeps his word.

No man is Left behind.

Verse

Silence is his fortress.

There he dwells alone.

Anger is his solace.

Though it rarely shows.

He's closed the curtains to the world.

Won't let the light shine in.

He lives alone with the shadows.

Talks aloud to dead men.

Chorus

His comrades won't desert him.

They're with him all the time.

A marine keeps his word.

No man is Left behind.

Bridge

It's there he shares his laughter.

It's there he shares his tears.

Only he knows that his strength

Is rooted in his fear. 

 

This topic was modified 5 days ago by ckiphen

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Gavin
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12/06/2019 6:37 pm  

I love the central idea, Carroll. Applying the marine's famous motto of never leaving anyone behind to the memories of his dead comrades, who never leave him. That's really clever. How about changing the word "guys" to comrades:" "His comrades won't desert him." "Guys" is kind of weak, it seems to me.

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ckiphen
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12/06/2019 7:44 pm  

Yep that'll work better. Wrote it quick didn't give it much thought.   Be glad when this seasonal job is over.

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