I love it. The best you've done, in my opinion. The new phone mic is better LOL. And you slowed it down enough to let us enjoy the lyrics as it goes along. 

It's funny and it's mean, but the listener can't help feeling that he deserves it. You are in danger of losing our sympathy with the line "Cuz you’re just too weak." At that point, the singer changes from sardonic to just a bully, and our sympathy switches a little to the object of his derision. I would definitely ditch that line if I were you or change it to something like "Cuz you just ain't real" or "Cuz you're just a fake."

You could add some variety and a stronger melodic feel to the chorus by going up instead of down on the word "four" at the end of lines. I think that would really improve it.

I think you are still trying to pack too many words into some lines, words that don't add anything.

"That your old man paid for" could just be "Your old man paid for"

"I think that probably matters more" could just be "That probably matters more"

etc.

Great song!

Dude!!! Love it. Great idea for a tune.

Tight writing here:

That’s a real nice truck
A brand new two tone four door ford
You’ve got a real nice truck
It’s a jacked up three valve four by four
Oh, it’s a real nice truck
Nine point one two steps to the door
You’ve got a real nice truck

Gavin, I read the "too weak" line as his hands are soft, meaning he doesn't work for a living so he's physically too weak to sweep a woman off her feet. With that interpretation, the line isn't full on bullying.  ???

Totally agree about taking out some unnecessary words to help the listener keep up.

Love this tune, Rhys. Such a clever twist...and here I thought it was a song about a truck. lol

Hey folks! Thanks a ton for the feedback, as always 😛 I’m glad y’all like it, and I hear ya on the clumsy line length thing. I might have rushed the verse a bit when writing it, I’ll clean it up when I get a chance. As far as the “just too weak” line, Gavin, I definitely intended it to come across as Jenny said, just trying to juxtapose the idea of a huge truck against a guy whose physical shape suggests he doesn’t need one. I hope that changes things a bit, because this guy doesn’t want to come across as any sort of bully 😛 That said, I feel like anyone who feels this song’s about them probably has a big enough ego to shake it off anyhow! Cheers folks, good to hear from ya both and hope all’s well with you 🙂

So I ask you why you bought it

You say the ladies love it

And you just wanna score

I say well it seems to me

If you can’t sweep em off their feet
you oughta not want any more

Then I ask you where you got it

You say your daddy bought it

And it really ain’t that great

At least you’ve got two more
just in case this one don't take