Cool lyric! Always enjoy historical context. You hope it inspires curiosity to read about what is in tge song and then it becomes even more meaningful.

Exactly what Carroll said! In fact, it made me do just that to understand the line about the "kings." I have a feeling a lot of listeners might just let those lines pass by, assuming they refer to the guillotine, when the real story is much more interesting. Those folks will also think the line "Didn't know their mistake" is lazy writing, vaguely alluding to a kind of regret for chopping off poor old Louis' head. How about this?...

Beheaded the "kings"
Wrong kings - what a shame!

or

Beheaded the "kings"
Without checking their names

One other thing worries me. For the sake of rhyme, are you going to feel compelled to pronounce the "a" in the last word as in "lame?" I fear that we might actually be able to hear you wincing as you do that. 

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Posted by: ckiphen

Cool lyric! Always enjoy historical context. You hope it inspires curiosity to read about what is in tge song and then it becomes even more meaningful.

Exactly so. There was so much history to tell but only 3 minutes to do it in. I had hoped I'd given enough information to grab the interest but not so much as to weigh it down. Thanks Carroll.

Posted by: Gavin

Exactly what Carroll said! In fact, it made me do just that to understand the line about the "kings." I have a feeling a lot of listeners might just let those lines pass by, assuming they refer to the guillotine, when the real story is much more interesting. Those folks will also think the line "Didn't know their mistake" is lazy writing, vaguely alluding to a kind of regret for chopping off poor old Louis' head. How about this?...

Beheaded the "kings"
Wrong kings - what a shame!

or

Beheaded the "kings"
Without checking their names

One other thing worries me. For the sake of rhyme, are you going to feel compelled to pronounce the "a" in the last word as in "lame?" I fear that we might actually be able to hear you wincing as you do that." 

Thanks Gavin. That's a very good point. I was so immersed in the subject that I forgot that people wouldn't necessarily see what I meant or know the history around it. I will definitely clarify the story of the beheaded statues. Thank you for pointing it out.

As for mispronouncing Notre Dame, I assure you I will not/could not say "Dame" as in "Same." Ugh and ew. First of all, the Canadian in me just cringes at the thought and second, I don't think our French fans would ever take me seriously again  ? 

Golly geez Jen, how in the world did you research the history of Notre Dame Cathedral and shape it into a lyric, an interesting lyric in fact, hats off to you, and Thank You for sharing.  Good luck and best wishes,

Speak soon

Aw, thanks Deac. I love to read and I love to learn. It was a fun way to spend my evening. Glad you like it. I'll be sure to post the song when it's done.

Jen

Hey Jen are you familiar with Cortez the Killer by Neil Young ? Listen to the live version at Farm Aid. Bet john could tear this up! 

Posted by: ckiphen

Hey Jen are you familiar with Cortez the Killer by Neil Young ? Listen to the live version at Farm Aid. Bet john could tear this up! 

Well THAT was an education. Wow! I've never heard much Neil Young and certainly not in that way. Tbh, I was kinda speechless. What an epic song. Found the 1991 live version was even MORE epic than the Farm Aid one (if that's possible):

So is that a request for an ES cover, Carroll?  ? 

No just thought you'd enjoy it. You can't really pin him down on a particular style. He was always full of surprises.

Powder finger is another about the civil war

I absolutely enjoyed it. Totally. In fact, now I'm listening to Dave Matthews Band cover of it. I'm converted.  ? 

Hadn't heard that version.

Check out Powderfinger

Powerfinger was good, but not as epic as Cortez...

That one was just amazing.

Enjoyed da Read Jenny well written (; ME LIKES;)