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16/10/2019 1:56 pm
He’s Not Crying In His Beer(Neil Cotton)
Bill came to the bar to drink a stack of beers
The guys raised one up all shoutin’ cheers
I asked Billy how the hell ya keepin'
He said not well cause my wife's aleavin
But
He’s not crying in his Beer
He hasn’t lost all his smarts
He’s not crying in his Beer
Tears make it too darn warm
He’s not crying in his Beer
Warm beer won’t fix his heart
Bill showed me her dear John see ya note
He works too much she's alone at home.
She saw their dog more than she did Bill
It cuddles better it’s her sleeping pill.
But
He’s not crying in his Beer
He hasn’t lost all his smarts
He’s not crying in his Beer
Tears make it too darn warm
He’s not crying in his Beer
Warm beer won’t fix his heart
Bill lost her and his best friend’s gone
All he has left is the next cold one
But
He’s not crying in his Beer
He hasn’t lost all his smarts
He’s not crying in his Beer
Tears make it too darn warm
He’s not crying in his Beer
Warm beer won’t fix his heart
This topic was modified 5 years ago 4 times by NEIL COTTON
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17/10/2019 9:38 am
I like this. A "she left me" song involving a guy with a beer in a bar that doesn't have him whining clichés at us. The change is as refreshing as that cold beer. Nice twist.
How about a different name for the character. Bill is so generic that it sounds less authentic, as if he's not a real guy. Bill and Jim are go-too names LOL. Frank? Ted?
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18/10/2019 8:56 am
Simplicity can be a real virtue in a Song. This Lyric gets it done quickly.
It sets the scene in a Verse,
gets quickly to the Chorus,
advances the story in another Verse/scene,
gives the Chorus again, with three 'hits' on THE Hook/title in each giving of the Chorus,
uses a Bridge, a brief variation of Melody and cadence to 'turn', to break the Repetition,
enabling a final giving of the Chorus, nine hits on THE Hook. You might even hit it a couple more times in a Coda/fade.
It will probably sing well and be appreciated by any audience. Neil, if memory serves, you once cited a KISS motto, Keep It Simple and Singable.
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18/10/2019 12:53 pm
He’s not crying in his Beer
He's still smiling while he’s here
His heart still yearns to be near
The pure cold love of his beer... 🙂
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18/10/2019 7:00 pm
He’s not crying in his Beer
He's still smiling while he’s here
His heart still yearns to be near
The pure cold love of his beer... 🙂
Thanks, this gives me some ideas.
18/10/2019 7:02 pm
That’s what we’re here for! ?
https://www.soundclick.com/artist/default.cfm?bandid=1449856
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18/10/2019 7:54 pm
He’s not crying in his Beer
Tears make it too darn warm
He’s not crying in his Beer
Warm beer won’t fix his heart
He’s not crying in his Beer
He grieves her loss just not here
This post was modified 5 years ago by NEIL COTTON
18/10/2019 11:20 pm
Let's hear it Neil! ?
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19/10/2019 9:55 pm
Noy a couple weeks...in Florida and then Key West Parrot Heads festival
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