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02/09/2019 9:57 am
Elora Nights It's an Elora night. There's something brewing in the air. Brother there's going to be a fight. There's silence in the air. The calm before the storm. Keep your kids inside... Don't let them out. Lock up your dogs. Lock all your doors... It's an Elora night. It's an Elora night. There's something brewing in the air. Brother there's going to be a fight. There's silence in the air. The calm before the storm. Stay under the street lights. Watch for the sign. Breathe in the air. Do you even care. It's an Elora night. It's an Elora night. There's something brewing in the air. Brother there's going to be a fight. There's silence in the air. The calm before the storm. Watch where your driving. Look everywhere. There's demons in the night Look out sister. You may be next. It's an Elora night. It's an Elora night. It's an Elora night. It's an Elora night. There's something brewing in the air. Brother there's going to be a fight. There's silence in the air. The calm before the storm. © Copyright Nov. 2nd 2018 11:00 AM Larry Gordon Killam (SOCAN) Yrral Mallik
Larry G. Killam
03/09/2019 3:33 am
Hi Larry,
I think your chorus can be optimized a bit. First, you repeat the term "in the air" in lines 2 and 4. I would go with a different wording unless you want to stress "in the air" for some reason. Being a composer, I'm used to a 4 or 8 line chorus. I would go with the following lines, but feel free to leave everything as is:
There's something brewing in the air.
Brother there's going to be a fight.
There's silence everywhere.
It's an Elora night.
All the best
Robert
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03/09/2019 1:12 pm
Thanks for the reply.Much appreciated my friend.
Larry G. Killam
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