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ckiphen
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Topic starter 08/12/2020 4:29 pm  

 

A fool who’s chasing the wind.

Verse

I’m two thousand miles from Brooklynn

Day dreaming of L.A.

I’m just outside of St. Louis

Stuck in the pouring rain.

Chorus

I’m in between, I’m in between.

Where I’m going and where I’ve been.

I’m nobody, I’m somebody

I’m a fool who’s chasing the wind.

Verse

I’m one sun set from disaster

Awaiting the sunrise.

In the eye of a hurricane.

Looking up at blue skies.

Chorus

I’m in between, I’m in between.

Where I’m going and where I’ve been.

I’m nobody, I’m somebody

I’m a fool who’s chasing the wind.

Bridge

I’m one song from a cup of coffee.

A long way from center stage.

I’m one night from a gig in Reno

Where I’ll blow the crowd away.

Verse

I’m a rainbow in the desert

 

A mirage nothing more.

I’m a river in an ocean.

A dream behind closed doors.

Chorus

I’m in between, I’m in between.

Where I’m going and where I’ve been.

I’m nobody, I’m somebody

I’m a fool who’s chasing the wind.

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A fool, a fool

 A fool who’s chasing the wind.

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09/12/2020 7:22 am  

Enjoyed Da Read.I think a simple title Chasing The Wind would be better.

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Topic starter 09/12/2020 9:27 am  

I didn't use it because Donovan had a song chasing the wind

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21/12/2020 4:35 pm  

Hey Carroll,
can I give this one a try?

All the best
Robert


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Topic starter 21/12/2020 5:18 pm  

Sure Rob. You and family ok?

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27/12/2020 4:06 pm  

Suggestion for the tag:

”I’m a fool, a fool,

But I’ll keep chasing the wind.”

Moves things forward a bit.

I may or may not be an enigma
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Topic starter 27/12/2020 4:13 pm  

Ill leave that up to Rob. Thanks for the suggestion.

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28/12/2020 4:57 pm  

Here's a rough draft without a mix:
https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14167714

Sorry for the bad vocals. I'm not too sure about this one.

All the best
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Topic starter 28/12/2020 6:38 pm  

I like the music but your vocals seem out of time with it.

 

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Topic starter 28/12/2020 6:39 pm  

Don't give up on it yet.

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28/12/2020 9:13 pm  

I think it's the 16th notes in the drum track that make it seem a little choppy, quantize to 8ths and simplify the rhythm a bit 🙂

https://www.soundclick.com/artist/default.cfm?bandid=1449856


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Topic starter 29/12/2020 8:48 am  

Thanks for the suggestion.

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29/12/2020 2:12 pm  

Thanks Tony. I did what you suggested. It does sound a bit smoother now. I uploaded the new version to Soundclick. It's at the existing URL I previously posted.

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Topic starter 29/12/2020 3:59 pm  

Much better this time. Want to get someone to sing the vocals on finished song?

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29/12/2020 4:37 pm  

I'm not sold on this to be honest. The melody doesn't grab me. It seems all over the place and never really gets going. Sorry if that comes across as negative. I only say it because I've heard such great things from you.

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