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05/03/2020 2:10 pm
How Can You Have A Ball When You Got The Blues
Now tell me how can you have a ball when you got the blues.
Well don't you think there's just too many rules.
Tell me where do I find the clues.
Don't you realize I already paid my dues.
Now tell me how can I have a ball when I'm down with the flu.
And tell me do you have the flu too.
Now what are we gonna do
When the music plays should I dance with Sue
But how can you have a ball when you got the blues
And how can you dance when you have the flu.
lets go and pray in the pews.
It's not the rockin pneumonia blues.
How can you have a ball when you got the blues
© Copyright Oct 23 rd 2016 8:00 P.M. All Rights Reserved
Larry Gordon Killam (SOCAN/ASCAP)
(;Yrral Mallik Publishing;)
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06/03/2020 4:41 pm
How Can You Have A Ball When You Got The Blues
Don't be lookin for a smile on my fa--ce
when my heart's been cut up by a strip of lace
I should be happy and foot loose
how can you have a ball when you got the blues
chorus)
Ohh the blues will take ya down , turn your world around, they'll swallow you up and spit you out whole
If ya let em have em the key, you'll never be set free
as long as the blues are around
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07/03/2020 8:35 am
Cathy Heller Reinstein, of CatchTheMoonMusic.com , refers to a Songwriting technique she calls a 'Brain Dump', wherein one simply writes down all the phrases of ideas that might apply to the concept for a given Song. Then, or later, one examines the phrases and picks the ones that make the most coherent sense of the concept.
This has the appearance of that technique. There are lots of ideas that can go together, but there's something missing, in my perception, a sense of the Singer-Character, and the actual object of his 'blues'. The Singer-Character addresses himself to a 'you', another 'character' in the 'world' of the Song, but it seems to be a generic audience, not a specific person, like a Love-Interest Character.
Letting that idea of the Singer-Character having a First-Person conversation with the person who is giving him the blues might make for an interesting tale.
Could it work as, "How can ...I... have a ball when ...I've...got the blues?
How Can You Have A Ball When You Got The Blues
Now tell me how can you have a ball when you got the blues.
Well don't you think there's just too many rules.
Tell me where do I find the clues.
Don't you realize I already paid my dues.
Now tell me how can I have a ball when I'm down with the flu.
And tell me do you have the flu too.
Now what are we gonna do
When the music plays should I dance with Sue
But how can you have a ball when you got the blues (I see this as a last Line for Verse I. Verse II would open with it, and Repeat the Structure and Melody of Verse I, with new Lyrics advancing the storyline, ending again with the title, THE Hook. Opening with the title makes it a Refrain-Type Chorus, in my assessment, a single Line that is the main idea of a Song; as opposed to a Stanza-Type Chorus, one comprised of several Lines like a Verse. That main idea is Repeated in the same positions in each Verse, same Lyrical Line, same Melody, opening and/or closing the Verse each time.
After Verse II a Chorus or, in this Song, a Bridge, breaks the Repetition to renew listener interest with a variation on the Rhyme-Scheme, the cadence of vocal delivery, a new Melody. It can be followed by a Verse III, or a final giving of the Bridge (or Chorus, if that's the Structure) to end within a reasonable time.
And how can you dance when you have the flu.
lets go and pray in the pews.
It's not the rockin pneumonia blues.
How can you have a ball when you got the blues
© Copyright Oct 23 rd 2016 8:00 P.M. All Rights Reserved
Larry Gordon Killam (SOCAN/ASCAP)
(;Yrral Mallik Publishing;)
(You seem to have thought of some more Lines and a Chorus (or Bridge) and added it in a second post. There is an 'Edit' button by which you can open your original post and insert new things, correct mistakes, move Lines around. Presenting a work, especially for Collaboration, probably works best when you present it in a 'complete' arrangement of Structure. It enables a potential Collaborator/Co-Writer to see what your concept is and build on it.)
How Can You Have A Ball When You Got The Blues
Don't be lookin for a smile on my fa--ce
when my heart's been cut up by a strip of lace (Here's a place to get the Love-Interest Character in the story by accusing her of doing the cutting.)
I should be happy and foot loose
how can you have a ball when you got the blues
chorus) (This Chorus stays in that generic philosophy, the Singer-Character addressing himself to the audience, not a Love-Interest Character. Getting 'her' in there, somehow, might make it more interesting. That conversational modus operandi can engage a listener better.)
Ohh the blues will take ya down , turn your world around, they'll swallow you up and spit you out whole
If ya let em have em the key, you'll never be set free
as long as the blues are around
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