This is a wonderful lyric. Very moving. I love the melody too. I'm not so sure about that growl in your voice in the chorus, "I will be your armour." It makes it sound aggressive, when the sentiment is tender and disrupts the mood established in the first verse. Personally, I think you should hold back and sing that first chorus sweetly as you do the first verse, maybe turn it up a bit in the second chorus and let rip when you have John's guitar behind your voice in the last chorus. The lyric lets you go in two directions. One is defiance where your voice carries a note of aggression towards whatever you are defending the person against. The other is is one of tenderness, where you are asking the person to trust you and let you help. You seem to be going with the second in the verses and then the first in the choruses, as if you are talking quietly on the couch with someone and then say, "Excuse me a moment," get up and bellow out the window. It works, but I just think it would be better the way I suggest. This is one of those songs rock bands would put half way through side 2 on an LP to show another side to their talent.

This is really a great song, Jen.

Thanks Gavin. I agree. I was thinking that if I do the song for real I'd ramp it up in the last chorus for sure and probably take a lot of the instrumentation away from the first chorus to give the song more of a build. Funny thing when I sang it, I actually was in no fit state to sing. My voice was broken from weeks of coughing (winter cold season has hit me hard this year), but I really wanted to get the song to my friend so even though I couldn't really hit the notes and shouldn't have even tried to, I just went for it once. What came out was what it was...a growly gritty ballad.

Nice!