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Polly
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chorus:

Well I bought high, sold low, / didn't know what I didn't know.

hard times caused my soul to bleed, /  oh Lord please just give me what I need

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Tryin to turn my life around,

tryin to land on higher ground,

well I used to want everything I seed,

but Lord, now all I want is what I need.

 

Every boy I met along the way

promises made, broke the very next day,

wish they coulda just let me be,

oh Lord, please give me what I need.

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All through the night and all day,

I need something to light my way.

give me signs that I know how to read,

Lord please give me what I need.

 

Flyin high, flyin low,

don't wanna know what I don't need to know.

All I know is I got a spirit to feed,

oh Lord please give me what I need.

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Fightin demons every day,

please don't let me get my way,

tryin to keep my feet on that narrow street.

Oh please just give me what I nee-eed.

 

Maybe today, maybe tomorrow,

any time, you know you never know,

nothin grows if you don't plant the see-eed,

oh Lord please give me what I need.

 

 

 

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Enjoyed Da Listen Polly   NICE !!!!!!!

Larry G. Killam


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Hi Polly . . . hear some pain in those lyrics, as well as some positive honest truth . . . wish the guitar was more in tune. Like your vocal delivery, you sound an experienced singer, and the lyrics shine, a folk song with lots of heart.


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Polly
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Thanks! Sorry about the guitar, I re-recorded it so hopefully it's better now.

Some pain in lyrics? Well, I guess as long as there is pain in life there will be pain in lyrics. Mine anyway. 😋 

 


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Polly . . . much better guitar tuning, thanks for that. Personally, I relate very much to the lyric subject, perhaps many who hear this will . . . my favourite and poignant lyric is "All I know is I got a spirit to feed" . . . haven't heard that line before, I think you're kinda' unique.


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Oh thank you. This song means a lot to me, because it summarizes my whole philosophy. It's kind of a prayer. 


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"kind of a prayer" . . . I got that . . . and I've always found that singing brings you closer to your core.


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"kind of a prayer" . . . I got that . . . and I've always found that singing brings you closer to your core.

It does.


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This Structure is what I would call a Refrain-Type Chorus, the last Line of each Verse being a 'Chorus Refrain', a single Line of Melody and summary Lyric, the Lyrical 'gist' of the Song. 
You don't seem to 'land' your words on the Beat, which can make them more effective, the Prosody of how the Melody to which the Lyric is sung 'marries' to the music (Arrangement). Sometimes that 'feel' for the 'marriage' comes as you sing a new Song over and over.
I wonder if adding in some Pronouns could make it stronger. There is a strong, easily perceived Singer-Character in the Lyric, but she omits herself, starting with Verse I Line 1. (I'm).

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(I'm) Tryin to turn my life around,

tryin to land on higher ground.

Well I used to want everything I seed,

but Lord, now all I want is What I Need.

 

Every boy I met along the way,

promises made, broke the very next day.

Wish they could'a just let me be.

Oh Lord, please give me What I Need.

--
(This next Stanza then, if we identify the Chorus Refrain as the Chorus, 'qualifies' as a Bridge, a Stanza with its own Melody, a little different from the Verses, to break the Repetition of two Verses both employing a nearly identical Melody, and 'Bridge' that space with 'Change'. A third Repeat might be monotonous, which some old Folk Songs are, that drone of Repetition perfectly acceptable to the ears of that time. Now the listener has developed a short attention span and 'Change', breaking Repetition, keeps them attentive.)

Well I bought high, sold low, / didn't know what I didn't know.

Hard times caused my soul to bleed. /  Oh Lord, please just, give me What I Need. (Commas are like musical 'rests')('Hard times...great Line.)
(Some critics say a Bridge should not contain the Chorus Refrain, but I think it can, and helps tie the Bridge into the Song. The function of the Bridge is to break Repetition with Change, but not to deviate from the main idea.)

 

All through the night and all day,

I need something to light my way. (There's that Pronoun, 'I', the 'actor' to do the 'action' of the Verb (need).

Give me signs that I know how to read. (Excellent Line)

Lord please give me What I Need.

 

Flyin high, flyin low,

don't wanna know what I don't need to know.

All I know is I got a spirit to feed.

Oh Lord please give me What I Need.

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Well I bought high, sold low, / didn't know what I didn't know. (The Pronoun, in there, keeps the Singer-Character in there.)

Hard times caused my soul to bleed./  Oh Lord please just, give me What I Need

 

Fightin' demons every day, (Pronoun? "I'm fightin'...?)

Please don't let me get my way. (Excellent Line)

Tryin' to keep my feet on that narrow street.

Oh please just give me What I Nee-eed.

 

Maybe today, maybe tomorrow,

any time, you know you never know.

Nothin' grows if you don't plant the see-eed.

Oh Lord, please give me What I Need.

Well I bought high, sold low, / didn't know what I didn't know.

Hard times caused my soul to bleed. /  Oh Lord please just, give me What I Need

Despite 1,000's of years of Songwriting humans have not exhausted the possibilities. There will always be another Song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? www.garyeandrews.com


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Thank you for the comments and suggestions Gary!


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