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Vet393
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08/04/2021 10:21 am  

Sometimes you aint gotta be serious....

https://www.reverbnation.com/johncarlmorris/song/32573409-two-beers


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Gavin
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08/04/2021 1:17 pm  

Ha! Now that's some good old-fashioned country 😆. Great hook. A couple of things I might change in the lyrics.

The lines "I left you behind me and I hope you can't find me" doesn't seem to fit very well with the rest of the song. It suggests that he has left a lover behind in some other town. But later on we learn that his wife (referred to in the third person) will be waiting for him at home.

How about something like this:

Well I left her at home
And I ain't answering my phone
Or those mean texts that she keeps sending me

Or even

I left her in the kitchen
And she'll have to her bitchin'
At the kids and the dog instead of me

The second version is maybe a bit too much. Depends on just how reprehensible you want this character to be LOL.

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Vet393
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14/04/2021 11:28 am  

I like this one,,,,,

Well I left her at home
And I ain't answering my phone
Or those mean texts that she keeps sending me

Maybe should use this or something similar

Always love the input!! Always a work in progress!!


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