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ckiphen
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23/04/2021 2:19 pm  

See what I see

Verse

I’ve walked among the diamonds

Scattered on the lawn.

Seen the morning sun shining

At the break of dawn.

Pre chorus

Oh won’t you come walking

Oh won’t you come see.

What a wonderful world.

That this earth can be.

Chorus

Take my hand come along.

See what I see.

Take my hand come along.

See what I see.

Bridge

Musical break

Verse

I’ve dived into the ocean.

Explored the deep sea.

Heard the music of sirens

Calling out to me.

Pre chorus

Oh won’t you come walking

Oh won’t you come see.

What a wonderful world.

That this earth can be.

Chorus

Take my hand come along.

See what I see.

Take my hand come along.

See what I see.

Verse

I’ve climbed atop a mountain.

Marveled at the view.

Seen the setting sun burning.

Wished I was with you.

Pre chorus

Oh won’t you come walking

Oh won’t you come see.

What a wonderful world.

That this earth can be.

Chorus

Take my hand come along.

See what I see.

Take my hand come along.

See what I see.

 

carroll kiphen


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Robbi
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01/05/2021 7:50 am  

Carroll, these lines are beautiful. I've got a James Taylor-type of song floating around in my head. Is this one still available?

All the best
Robert


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Robbi
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01/05/2021 8:25 am  

If anybody here is interested, I just did a quick & dirty instrumental recording ... piano, bass and drums. This is what the simple playback could sound like. Currently I have a bridge section (1:53-2:11) in the recording. Carroll, if I decide on leaving that in, I'll need 4 bridge lines. It does have a slight James Taylor feel to it, doesn't it?

https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14240732

All the best
Robert

This post was modified 2 weeks ago by Robbi

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ckiphen
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01/05/2021 9:34 am  

I get the james Taylor vibe. Good job. I'll work on a bridge.

carroll kiphen


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Robbi
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04/05/2021 9:23 am  

Hey Carroll,
this is what the first vocal recording sounds like. I need to work on the mix and add some ear candy: https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14240732

All the best
Robert

SEE WHAT I SEE

Verse
Dewdrops shimmer like diamonds
Scattered on the lawn
Breathtaking morning sunshine
At the break of dawn

Pre chorus
If you look
You will see
What a wonderful world
This can be

Chorus
Take my hand come with me
See what I see
Take my hand come with me
See what I see

Verse
Vistas from a mountain
Valleys painted green
All of natures beauty
Begging to be seen

Pre chorus
Chorus

Bridge
You and me should go on a journey
Climb mountains, sail the seas
View the masterpieces of nature
Come see the world with me

Chorus


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ckiphen
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04/05/2021 10:04 am  

It came together quite nicely. Wish more people would see what I see. As always appereciate the hard work. Happy Birthday pal!

carroll kiphen


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Gavin
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07/05/2021 5:35 pm  

Obviously a very rough recording, but I think it has potential. It's a nice simple, uplifting lyric. I'm not so sure about just repeating the lines of the chorus. It's a bit boring. How about something like:

Take my hand come with me
See what I see
Open your eyes and open your heart
To the wonders that I see

You can probably come up with something better.

I may or may not be an enigma
http://mysteriousbeings.com


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