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ckiphen
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Fish bowl

Verse 
A fish in an aquarium
His world a box of glass.
As he swims around in circles
Each turn looks like the last.
He lives life in captivity
No hope of being free.
He looks at me with woeful eyes
Wishing he was me.
Chorus
My conscience just can’t take it! 
I’m in my own fish bowl. 
A captive in my own world
A tortured restless soul.
I’ll give my friend his freedom
I’m going to let him go.
My conscience just can’t take it! 
I’m in my own fish bowl.
Verse 
I dip a net into his world. 
And drop him in a jar;
A place for him to ride with me
A short drive in the car.
There’s a high tide at the jetties
I pour him in the sea.
He circles once and disappears
I wish that it was me.
Chorus
My conscience just can’t take it! 
I’m in my own fish bowl. 
A captive in my own world
A tortured restless soul.
I’ll give my friend his freedom
I’m going to let him go.
My conscience just can’t take it! 
I’m in my own fish bowl.
Bridge
Swimming round looking out
Thru walls that I can’t see.
I’m trapped inside my fish bowl
Wishing I was free.

carroll kiphen


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Gavin
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Projecting your feelings on to an animal you're looking at is the great basis for a song. It can't fail to arouse sympathy for the animal and, by extension, for the observer. This works well here. At first I thought I'd like to know more about what the singer sees as his fishbowl, but maybe it's better to leave it vague.

Were you actually looking at a fish when you wrote this?

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ckiphen
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I was in a waiting room that had an aquarium.

carroll kiphen


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popitup
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Hey Carroll . . . another good concept for a song . . . at first glance, I'm thinking a fish probably won't have such lofty thoughts, but as your lyric progresses, you've personified it nicely, and I think the fishbowl existence, the limitations, the captivity, and the conscience asking for freedom . . . well, it all translates to our lives . . . think I feel another song coming on. Hmmm.


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ckiphen
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Wrote it a few years back while sitting in a waiting room.Apprecite it. Shows the feedback on the last one. Have it posted anywhere?

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