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Vet393
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Till the morning light 

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It's to early for this fighting

Let the Sun rise in the sky

Step out of your corner

Lets dance and make

things right

It's so easy to forget,

All the time that we've spent.

How can you turn…..

and walk away?

 

Chorus

As you close your eyes

I can be your shelter

All thru the night

I can hold you close

Till the morning light

 

Can you offer forgiveness,

For the things I have done?

Can you live with…. All the tears

I have caused.

In my heart I will be better

And help you understand

with god as my witness

I will be a better man

C

As the sun is rising

lie here by my side

I can offer you my comfort

As this storm passes by

I will always show I love you

Each and every day

the sun will always shine

After a little rain

Cx2

 

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Gavin
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It's a sweet lyric. I can hear a simple acoustic guitar melody.

I'm not a huge fan of the line, "I can make things right." It seems a little dry. I would focus more on the physical closeness alluded to elsewhere in the song. Something like, "Let me hold you tight."

Also, "Each and every day" seems a bit bland. How about, "You'll feel it every day."

Just things that occurred to me. It's good as it is.

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I like the words, I can adjust it. Thanks for the reply, I continue to work on the writing.


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MP3


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Sweet-n-Simple, great rhythm! 

Good to hear you're still at it 🙂

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Vet393
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how about” as you close your eyes”@gavin 


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