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13/01/2024 4:38 am
Till the morning light
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It's to early for this fighting
Let the Sun rise in the sky
Step out of your corner
Lets dance and make
things right
It's so easy to forget,
All the time that we've spent.
How can you turn…..
and walk away?
Chorus
As you close your eyes
I can be your shelter
All thru the night
I can hold you close
Till the morning light
Can you offer forgiveness,
For the things I have done?
Can you live with…. All the tears
I have caused.
In my heart I will be better
And help you understand
with god as my witness
I will be a better man
C
As the sun is rising
lie here by my side
I can offer you my comfort
As this storm passes by
I will always show I love you
You'll feel it every day
the sun will always shine
After a little rain
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©jocamo_production2023
13/01/2024 8:49 am
It's a sweet lyric. I can hear a simple acoustic guitar melody.
I'm not a huge fan of the line, "I can make things right." It seems a little dry. I would focus more on the physical closeness alluded to elsewhere in the song. Something like, "Let me hold you tight."
Also, "Each and every day" seems a bit bland. How about, "You'll feel it every day."
Just things that occurred to me. It's good as it is.
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15/01/2024 1:53 am
Sweet-n-Simple, great rhythm!
Good to hear you're still at it 🙂
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