The Rain Falls Down
 

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Vet393
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27/04/2021 9:13 am  

Just working on this one

The rain falls down *

 

It's too early for this fighting

Let the sun rise in the sky

Step back to your corner

Then, Let’s dance and make

things right

 

It's so easy to forget,

All the time we've spent.

Should we weather the storm,

Or give up and walk away?

 

Chorus

And when the rain falls down

I just want to make it right

I'll be your shelter, all thru the night

If I can hold you close

Till the morning light

I will always show I love you

When the rain is falling down

 

Bridge

Can you offer forgiveness

For the things I have done.

Are you able to live with?

All The pain I cause

In my heart I will be better

to help you understand

I can beg for your forgiveness

I will be a better man

 

Solo

 

Now the sun is rising

Lay your head by my side

I can offer my comfort

As this storm passes by

 

I will always show I love you

Each and every day

the sun will always shine

the storms will pass away

 

Chorus

And when the rain falls down

I just want to make it right

I will be your shelter, all thru the night

If I can just hold you close

We will Praise the morning light

I will always show I love you

When the rain is falling down

I will always say I love you

When the rain is falling down

 

C: J Carl Morris

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Gavin
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27/04/2021 8:53 pm  

That's a nice lyric. Knowing your musical style, I think it'll be a good fit and I look forward to hearing it.

I think my least favorite bit is the title/hook. It sounds a bit unnatural with the word "down" at the end. Rain isn't going to fall up, and people would normally just say "When the rain falls." Maybe "When the rain comes down" would be better. Maybe it's just me overthinking it. I have a tendency to do that 🙂

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Vet393
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27/04/2021 8:58 pm  

I havent done anything with this, "As the rain falls" may work better


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Vet393
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01/05/2021 9:02 pm  

 

adjusted.....

After a little rain  *

V1

It's to early for this fighting

Let the sun rise in the sky

Step back to your corner

Lets dance and try to make

things right

It's so easy to forget,

All the time that we've spent.

After all this fussin and fighting,

Should we give up and walk away?

 

Chorus

After a little rain

I want to make things right

I'll be your shelter,all thru the night

If I can hold you close

Till the morning light

I will always show I love you

After a little rain

 

V2

Can you offer forgiveness

For the things I have done.

Are you able to live with,

All The pain I cause

In my heart I will be better

And to help you understand

I can beg for your forgivness

I will be a better man

 

Solo

 

V3

Now the sun is rising

Lay your head by my side

I can offer you my comfort

As this storm passes by

I will always show I love you

Each and every day

the sun will always shine

After a little rain

 

Chorus

After a little rain

I want to make things right

I will be your shelter,all thru the night

If I can hold you close

We will Praise the morning light

I will always show I love you

After a little rain

I will always say I love you

After a little rain

 

 

©️jcarlmorris 2021

 


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Gavin
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07/05/2021 4:56 pm  

Hey Carl,

You're gong to hate me, but I think "After a little rain" is a step down from the original. It sounds a bit weak. How about "After the storm." Or "In the middle of the storm," depending on what you are trying to say. It's a lot stronger and also brings in ideas beyond just rain, such as wind and lightning.

Also, I missed this the first time, but "Lay your head by my side" seems a little strange, suggesting that she is either a midget or someone with a detachable head. I would be surprised if that was what you meant by that line. How about "Lay your head next to mine."

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Vet393
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07/05/2021 6:00 pm  

I actually already did edit, but never posted

changed title and other things.....

shes not as tall as me, do you know..... lol

 

Till the morning light *

V1

It's to early for this fighting

Let the sun rise in the sky

Step out of your corner

Lets dance and make

things right

It's so easy to forget,

All the time that we've spent.

After all this fighting,

Should we just walk away?

 

Chorus

If I can make things right

I'll be your shelter,

all thru the night

If I can hold you close

Till the morning light

 

V2

Can you offer forgiveness

For the things I have done.

Are you able to live with,

All the tears I've caused

In my heart I will be better

And to help you understand

I can beg for your forgivness

I will be a better man

 

Solo

 

V3

Now the sun is rising

Lay here by my side

I can offer you my comfort

As this storm passes by

I will always show I love you

Each and every day

the sun will always shine

After a little rain

 

Chorus

If I can make things right

I'll be your shelter,

all thru the night

If I can hold you close

Till the morning light

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Gavin
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08/05/2021 4:16 pm  

I like that better 🙂

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