I was only able to make out the lyrics because I was reading along. I don't know if it's your recording set up or your enunciation, probably a bit of both, but the words are lost to the listener. That's a pity, as there are some intriguing lines in there. I must admit that, as a whole, it didn't make sense to me. Maybe it's not meant to. The title suggests that it's a stream of consciousness kind of thing.

There's not much of a melody here and not a lot of what one might call singing, but that's OK. It's all about the atmosphere and the words - so let us hear them 🙂

I like the atmosphere and feel of this. I think you have something here. The way to listen to this would be just to let it wash over you. But for that to be a pleasurable experience, you need to be able to make out the words. Did I mention that already, LOL?

Hey Gavin, thanks for the feedback! Lyrically it’s not necessarily written through a stream-of-consciousness method, but rather as an analysis of a stream-of-consciousness, if that makes sense. The narrator’s describing the world through a shifting lens of perception, which through the first half is generally melancholy, but with small shifts in mindset that are supposed to represent the crockery that’s known as the four humours, and the more obvious flip is supposed to represent a flip from depression into hypomania, then the turn to instrumental music is supposed to be the escalation into full-blown mania, dropping any logical pretence it had and just becoming a mess of noise. Then the cool down bit’s supposed to be back to depression. It’s a hard song to follow, if it even does actually communicate at some level what I intended, which I’m never really sure about. I’ve gotta keep working on the enunciation thing, someday I’ll figure it out! 😛 Cheers 

That's kind of what I meant. Not that you just sat down and wrote whatever came into your head, but that the effect you were going for was stream of consciousness. It takes a lot of work to make a song seem like it's just random thoughts in someone's head.

I actually did one kind of similar in a way. Maybe I'll post it. It's not really new, but I do intend to go back and rework some of the lyrics, so maybe a bit of feedback would be helpful.

Are you just singing into your phone? Maybe a decent mic would help with the intelligibility thing. They don't have to be expensive.

Haha, right sorry, when ya explained it it seemed immediately obvious that was what you meant 😛

And yeah, I’d love to check out your take on the style and give you whatever feedback I can! Lemme know when ya post it, or feel free to pm it if you’d rather.

As far as recording, yeah I’m just singing into a cellphone. I think apple sells mics that directly interface with your phone. Might pick one of those up, can’t imagine it’d hurt.

cheers

Rhys, if you have a computer available, you might want to start using that with an inexpensive DAW and a USB mic, like a Yeti Blue or something.