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Love hit the road


ckiphen
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Love hit the road

Verse

I made her acquaintance some time back.

For a while we were quite the thing.

We even went shopping together

But couldn’t decide on a ring.

Verse

Love has been a stranger of late.

Haven’t seen her for a while.

Been looking but haven’t found her

And I’ve gone many a mile.

Pre chorus

No goodbye, no so long.

No message, no call.

Chorus

I wonder why, I have to know.

Why love hit the road.

Verse

I started in South Carolina

And I worked my way up the coast.

But I never caught sight of her sail.

I feared I was chasing a ghost.

Pre chorus

No goodbye, no so long.

No message, no call.

Chorus

I wondered why, I have to know.

Why love hit the road.

Verse

I thought I saw her in Delaware

But it turned out it wasn’t her.

So I set my sights on the west coast

And headed for the sun and surf.

Pre chorus

No goodbye, no so long.

No message, no call.

Chorus

I wondered why, I have to know.

Why love hit the road.

Verse

When I think that maybe I’ve found her

She vanishes into thin air.

I’ve been looking close to a year now

But haven’t found her anywhere.

Bridge

From the day that love left my life

I have tried to find her again.

I’ve searched to and fro all for naught.

I lost her when we became friends.

 

Love has been a stranger of late.

Haven’t seen her for a while.

Pre chorus

No goodbye, no so long.

No message, no call.

Chorus

I wonder why, I have to know.

Why love hit the road.

 

carroll kiphen


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Deacon
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Hello Carroll, Thank you for sharing, good idea and good hook.  The structure and rhyme fit well, seems like a while before you hit the hook though.   I do wonder if five verses might make the song too long to keep your audience interested.  Good luck and best wishes,

Speak soon

Music is an international language, say it with a song. deaconmusic4u@gmail.com


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ckiphen
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Yes too long. Any suggestions

carroll kiphen


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