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ckiphen
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09/04/2020 10:16 am  

In your eyes

 

Verse

There are long walks by the ocean

Laughing holding hands.

There are talks on summer evenings

Going over plans.

I want so to be your lover.

Your sweet lover man.

Chorus

In your eyes I see the future

And it’s my paradise.

I see all I’ll ever want.

In your eyes, in your eyes.

Verse

There are gatherings with family

Good times to be had.

There are moments spent together

Few are ever sad.

I want so to be your husband.

Your forever man.

Chorus

In your eyes I see the future

And it’s my paradise.

I see all I’ll ever want.

In your eyes, in your eyes.

Bridge

In your eyes I see a world of possibilities

A chance to find happiness I never thought I’d see.

Verse

There are nights alone together

Heaven in your arms.

There are evenings that we make love

Neath a sky of stars.

I want so to be your lover.

Come and take my hand.

Chorus

In your eyes I see the future

And it’s my paradise.

I see all I’ll ever want.

In your eyes, in your eyes.

 

carroll kiphen


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Deacon
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09/04/2020 1:10 pm  

Hello Carroll, I like this lyric, might be one verse and one chorus too long, not sure.  The imagery is good and helps the way through the lyric.  When I saw the title, the first thought was the Peter Gabriel hit back in the 80's, you might consider "Your Eyes" as the title.  If you don't mind, I'd like to play around with the structure a little and try some melodies out on it.  Thanks for sharing, good luck and best wishes,

Speak soon

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ckiphen
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09/04/2020 2:09 pm  

Sure go ahead. Chop some if needed.

carroll kiphen


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Deacon
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09/04/2020 3:29 pm  

Ok, Thanks Carroll.

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