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18/10/2020 8:00 pm
"Hard Sale"
I know where your kisses are leading, girl I'm not into your games, there' s plenty out there you could be meeting
so ain't no need in feeding this flame, coz
(chorus)
I'm a hard sale baby hard sale sugar ,,,maybe coz I've been bit, I'm a hard sale mama hard sale
darlin , when the figures just don't fit
Don't look at me with your want-in, tryin to cast your gypsy spell, and don't bother doin your flaunt-in coz I'm hip to that as well
(chorus)
I'm a hard sale baby hard sale sugar ,,,maybe coz I've been bit, I'm a hard sale mama hard sale
darlin , when the figures just don't fit
Ain't no need in advertising
making it what it ain't
it don't take me long realizing what lies beneath your fancy paint
(chorus)
I'm a hard sale baby hard sale sugar ,,,maybe coz I've been bit, I'm a hard sale mama hard sale
darlin , when the figures just don't fit (on last chorus) you might as well pack up and quit, coz I'm a hard sale
This topic was modified 4 years ago by AllfortheLord
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18/10/2020 9:18 pm
Good lyric. Really tight and focused with a catchy hook to it.
This line seemed a little strange to me: "and don't bother doin your flaunt-in coz it won't work as well." I'd expect "either," rather than "as well." If you wanted to, you could change it to something like, "cause I'm wise to that as well."
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19/10/2020 11:30 pm
Good lyric, very interesting. You are truly a great writer, and please don't take this wrong, however have you considered changing "sale" to "sell"? Best wishes with this lyric, it has great potential with the right music, which I'm positive you already have. Good luck,
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20/10/2020 9:40 am
I have no problem with doing that both have the same sound and close enough meaning to what I was writing about, thanks, hope this one gets music and voice and air ready demo made
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