Sounds like you're exploring new styles. 

I Never Took You Off My Phone 

I met your sister yesterday ('met' sounds like they were introduced. How about 'ran into'?)
She said, hell yes, you’re doing okay!
Loving every single day
Without me

Just living in unwedded bliss (I'm not sure who's talking. Is this still the sister?)
Never knew life could be as good as this
Not a single thing you miss
About me

(She says you're) living in unwedded bliss 
(You) Never knew life could BE as good as this
(There's) Not a single thing you miss
About me (Here you pick up the Un-Rhymed 'without me', Nursery Rhyme style. Should be effective on listeners.)

PRE-CHORUS
Now you ask me how I have the gall (Delete 'now' maybe?)
After all this time to call
Well, really, there’s no reason at all
So please, please, please....

CHORUS
Don’t get me wrong - oh no - I don’t love you no more ('no' vs. 'any'?)
And this song is just a way of closing the door (Delete 'And'?) ('a' way, abstract; 'my' way, he 'owns' it.)
I called because my finger touched your name by mistake (Delete 'I called because'?)
I never took you off my phone (There's no setup Rhyme for 'phone'. Could it be stronger with one? "I touched your name by mistake, TONIGHT WHILE I WAS HERE ALONE. I Never Took You Off My Phone.) (A friend just got dumped in an interstate relationship because he accidentally sent a friend request like this to a former boyfriend of the girlfriend. There's a lesson here that may strengthen the market appeal of your Song Gavin! Probably a frequent occurrence.)

Me? Well, yes I’m doing great
I just got back from a red hot date (the 'red hot date' Line is easily seen through, which, I think, is your intent.)
That’s the only reason I’m awake so late
Believe me (The Un-Rhymed words, left hanging, awaiting the pickup.)

And yes, I might have had a drink or two (You know me and 'And'. I think the Lines read the same without the 'And's.)
And yes, I might have been thinking of you
But that’s not what made my finger do (And you know me and 'But'.)
What it did (Here I think you have to repeat the Nursery Rhyme pattern set in the first two Stanzas. Either Rhyme 'Believe me' or change it to Rhyme 'What it did'. Challenging. I run through the alphabet looking for Rhymes, seeing if concepts also fit.)

PRE-CHORUS
I told you I never meant to call (I'm telling you I never meant to call.)
And I’m not missing you at all ('And'?)
So don’t be waiting for me to come crawling ('So'?) (This isn't me, coming crawling,)
Back to you....

CHORUS
Don’t get me wrong - oh no - I don’t love you 'any' more
This song is just 'my' way of closing the door
My finger touched your name by mistake
tonight while I was here alone.
I never took you off my phone

INSTRUMENTAL BRIDGE

CHORUS
Don’t get me wrong, I know, you don’t love me 'any' more
This song is just another thing for you to ignore (you can ignore)
Things can never be the way that they were before (Delete 'that'?)
I should take your number off my phone

(Coda)
I don’t have time now, but maybe tomorrow
Or the day after, I guess, maybe or a
Week from now - I don’t know
But I will

Some day

One day

I'll take your number off my phone
('They' advise not to change your Chorus, but, if there's a way to break the 'rule' it's like this, the last giving of the Chorus. You're also changing the title Line, but that may work too, since it's the end of the Song. (I never took your number...I'll take your number...')

Thanks for all the feedback and suggestions, Gary. I know you're not a fan of all those "ands" and "buts." Neither am I usually. In this case, they kind of fall naturally into the melody, so I may end up keeping more of them than I usually would. Same with that "that" that you suggested omitting. (Three consecutive "that's" - do I get a prize?)

I really like your suggestion about a set-up rhyme for "phone" at the end of the chorus. I'll try that for sure. And I take your point about the lack of a rhyme at the end of the verses the second time around, as well as the other suggestions you made.

Thanks again, Gary. I really appreciate the input.

A pop tune. I'm impressed. Always a challenge to write something new. Good on ya.

One suggestion:

[Says you're] living in unwed bliss [this change would keep the who-is-saying-what clear & also match the count of the song's 1st line]
Never knew life could be as good as this
Not a single thing you miss
About me

To be honest, I'm not entirely sure what pop is any more. To some people it seems to be that overproduced, auto-tuned, effects-laden, rap infused monotone that my car radio spits out before my kids get out and I  can tune it to something else. Or maybe it's Taylor Swift, whose songs have a lot of the same characteristics but somehow sound better. The melody for this feels poppy to me, but it will probably just end up sounding like my other stuff!

We seem to be telepathic, Jen. That change you suggested occurred to me this morning and for the same reason. Spooky!  

I learned sometime after I decided 'pop' simply meant that this new, unique piece of music had 'popped up' 'popped in' to the world, that it was short for 'popular'. I prefer my definition, that it's someone's exploration of the possibilities of Lyric, Melody, and arrangement, part derivative, part innovative, and, hopefully, that it works, even if it swings the pendulum out a little further or in a new direction. Pop!
 
Regarding syllable/note counts, as long as the variation is not extreme, and especially in a conversational-style Lyric, it can work without exactitude. Short Lines, which means short, very specific Melodies, have to match up very closely. Longer Lines, as in a story-telling mode, more free-flowing conversationally, can still 'match up' Melodically, closely enough to not aggravate the listener's sense of Structure. It becomes the Songwriter's 'judgment call' in that esoteric realm of 'not enough', 'enough', 'too much'. 

The most strategic matter is that it 'communicates', that your strategies of syllable/note count agreement do not render it conversationally odd, Yoda-Speak, twisting normal speech patterns to land on a desired Rhyme, omitting the noun/pronoun who is the 'actor' to do the 'action' of the verb. Make it sing, by all means, but let it talk.

Posted by: Gary E. Andrews

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The most strategic matter is that it 'communicates', that your strategies of syllable/note count agreement do not render it conversationally odd, Yoda-Speak, twisting normal speech patterns to land on a desired Rhyme, omitting the noun/pronoun who is the 'actor' to do the 'action' of the verb. Make it sing, by all means, but let it talk.

Well said, Gary.

I was just sitting at the bar, admiring from afar, young lovers dancing to unfamiliar tunes...

Then reaching for my wallet, once the barmaid called it, at 2:00AM it seems I butt dialed you... 🙂 

"...butt dialed..." lol 

The Butt-Dial Blues, entered into eminent domain for any use anybody wants to make of it. LOL
(Verse I)
I butt-dialed you baby!
No, it don't mean a thing.

Just like your wedding vows,

or your wedding ring.

It's the only part of me,

that still applies to you.

If you don't like it

you can kiss it.
(Chorus Refrain)

Yes, I Butt-Dialed You.

(Verse II)

I butt-dialed you baby!
I'm sorry it's so late.

I just called a taxi.

I came outside to wait.

I'm sitting on my fender,

with the Butt-Dial Blues.

Don't go tellin' me

you miss it.

Yes, I butt-dialed you.

(Bridge)

Butt-dial, Butt-dial baby!

It could only happen to me and you,

another way to drive us crazy.

We've got the Butt-Dial Blues.

(Verse III)

I butt-dialed you baby!
It's a fact in our fate.

We're stuck with memories

of some better days.

So how 'bout I come over,

and put you back to sleep?

There's a danger

if we risk it.

Yes, I butt-dialed You.

(Repeat Bridge)

Butt-Dial, Butt-Dial Baby!

It could only happen to me and you,

another way to drive us crazy.

We've got the Butt-Dial Blues.

Another way to drive us crazy.

We've got the Butt-Dial Blues.

(Coda)

What's that? Why'd I call a taxi?
Well, I'm a little drunk.

A big drunk?
Well, yeah, that too.

So, how about it?

Okay. See ya in a few.

Butt-Dial! Butt-Dial baby!

WhaaHaHaHaHehehee.... I'd have to be much drunker than that... Seriously, I'm mean gutter crawlin' commode huggin' stink faced stupid plowed!!! But.... This is something I could still get "behind"... (get it... BEHIND)  🙂  

Well, I did some work on this. Not sure that I'll be doing more of this kind of thing.  

All comments and suggestions appreciated.

Ha! That's cute Gavin. Love the way you went upbeat. On the music side, I'd try having the music end right after you sing "off my phone." As is, it just meanders on to the end. I do hope you do more of this kind of thing because I think you've done a great job.

Jen

Thanks Jen. Fair point about the ending. I wasn't sure if it was a different and fun way to end or just a bit strange and unnecessary.

I might go back and tweak the vocals at some stage. Peter once commented on a song that I posted over on SW101 that I sounded like an English school teacher. I know what he means, although I didn't think it was much of a problem on that particular song. I can hear it on this one though.  

Not having a personal reference for what an "English School Teacher" is, I don't really know what he or you mean by that, but I'll take your word for it. lol