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ckiphen
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Verse

She’s a jalapeño pepper.

She adds spice to my life.

She’s hot as the Laredo sun.

Makes loving twice as fun.

Chorus

One kiss has me burning

Can’t quench my desire.

I’ve tried but I can’t quit.

Can’t put out the fire.

Verse

She’s a tantalizing dancer

Ooh how she moves her hips.

Seen her do a sexy salsa 8

Has me licking my lips.

Chorus

One kiss has me burning

Can’t quench my desire.

I’ve tried but I can’t quit.

Can’t put out the fire.

Verse

She’s a Texas chili pepper

She knows how to bring the heat.

She makes most everything better

Her lovings hard to beat.

Chorus

One kiss has me burning

Can’t quench my desire.

I’ve tried but I can’t quit.

Can’t put out the fire.

carroll kiphen


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NEIL COTTON
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rhyme scheme of V1 is different from the other verses (unless it is an Intro with different melody)

She’s a jalapeño pepper.

Adds spice to my  night

A coolant for my jets is
Southern Comfort  on ice

 

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Gavin
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For consistency with the other verses, you could just swap the lines around in the first verse:

She’s a jalapeño pepper.
Hot as the Laredo sun 
Adds the spices to my life.
Makes loving twice as fun.

or...

She’s a jalapeño pepper.
Hot as the Laredo sun
Makes life twice as spicy.
Makes loving twice as fun.

I like my second suggestion better because "spicy" is a word you can have fun singing at the end of the line, and the repetition of "makes...twice" is kind of neat.

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ckiphen
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The first one works great!

carroll kiphen


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Robbi
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I personally don't like the repetition of the word "twice" but it's a question of taste. If you want to keep the word "spicy" at the end of the line and avoid the repetition you can go with "Makes life much more spicy".


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