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ckiphen
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Martha

Verse

Martha had auburn hair

Her eyes were emerald green.

Martha would sit outside

Beneath a shady tree.

Chorus

She'd light up- inhale- float away.

Martha would get high.

She'd fly with eagles in the sky,

Smoke her grass all day.

Verse

I'd sit down beside her

Her she would take my hand.

No one spoke_ not a word

Till we came back to land.

Verse

Jellybeans, the green ones;

We'd always share a few.

She once had me kiss her,

Said she could taste the truth.

Chorus

She'd light up_ inhale _ float away.

Martha would get high.

She'd fly with eagles in the sky

Smoke her grass all day.

Verse

She was more than just stoned

Her eyes could read your soul.

She could speak with angels

Once even told me so

Verse

Martha's eyes h those eyes

They saw what children see.

Martha was beautiful

She taught me to believe.

Chorus

She'd light up_ inhale_ float away

Martha would get high.

She'd fly with eagles in the sky

Smoke her grass all day.

Bridge

She'd look at me like she could see

The me I tried to hide.

I found another side of me

In her emerald eyes.

 

carroll kiphen


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Deacon
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Hello Carroll, I like the title, so simple, "Martha", it pulls the reader in to find out "what is this Martha about?".  You really have some great verses, in my opinion too many, however there is a lot to work with if you wanted to shorten them.  The chorus is just right for this lyric, although I'm not completely sold on the last line.  JMO, you have a good lyric, could be great with a little work and music.  Good luck and best wishes with this piece,

Speak soon

Music is an international language, say it with a song. deaconmusic4u@gmail.com


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ckiphen
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  • I'm leaving this as OT is. Just my musingS about a really unusual girl I met in college. Sometimes wonder what became of her.

carroll kiphen


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YrralMallik
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I big on just a simple one name songs.Enjoyed Da Read Carroll

Larry G. Killam


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