Hello Carroll, Good write, I like this one.  Hmmm, ( don't you just hate when I do the "Hmmm" thing?)  Do you have a particular style or genre in your mind for this.  I'm feeling a blues type melody when I read this.  Give me an idea as to what you would like to hear it as.  Good luck and best wishes,

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Don't have anything in mind but i guess it has a bluesy sort of vibe to it. Just go with your gut feeling as to how you read it or it sings best.

@Carroll, not sure you will like this, but I got to kickin this lyric around and came up with this, if it helps, keep it, if not, sweep it.

V1
I strayed in to uncharted waters,
in search of the girl of my dreams.
Found love comes with unseen danger,
and the risk of you not loving me.
Chr
The moment I saw you,
I knew right away,
you'd be a hard one to keep.
The moment we kissed,
I knew right away,
I was in too deep.
V2
I was past the point of return,
over my head in love.
I tried to believe, but it was in vain,
I might not be what you want.
Chr
The moment I saw you,
I knew right away,
you'd be a hard one to keep.
The moment we kissed,
I knew right away,
I was in too deep.
Br
I should have tested the waters.
Hearts are not always wise.
Time will tell, only time will tell,
if we go down or survive.
Chr
The moment I saw you,
I knew right away,
you'd be a hard one to keep.
The moment we kissed,
I knew right away,
I was in too deep.
Outro
The moment we kissed,
I knew right away,
I was in too deep.

Hope this helps, good luck and best wishes,

Speak soon

Man you nailed it on the rewrite. Consider this one a co write.

Well Hey, Thank you Carroll, I am honored.  Now let me see if I can come up with the music.  Best wishes,

Speak soon

Cool. Give it a go.

Hello Carroll, just wanted to let you know I hadn't forgot about this lyric.  I have some pretty solid music for it and I'm working on presentation, (the old voice isn't what it used to be, but I'm working it out).  I have a track I can send to you in case you have some reservations about the music, but the vocals aren't that great, or I can work the vocals out then send it to you.  Either way is fine with me, just let me know.   Best wishes,

Speak soon

Send what you got. I'll give it a listen. Staying home and avoiding the crowds.

Hello Carroll, I just sent you an e mail with the link to this song.  When you get a chance, take a listen and give any feed back so we can work on this.  Best wishes,

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1.  I really like the music. Was suprised by the electric guitar. Kinda southern rock vibe to it. Only listened on the phone so not sure but maybe back off the distortion a notch. Are you going to add drums or anything in? Don't know what all you have to record with. 

Hello Carroll, Thank you for the listen and the feed back.  I can tone down the distortion a little if need be, but listen on another device, maybe laptop.  I thought the distortion was a little much when I listened to the song on the recorder before uploading to Soundcloud, then when listening on the laptop the vocal seemed a little overwhelming.  Sorry, no DAW, just a guy with a guitar, an amp, and a one track voice recorder, I'm ultra low tech.  Best wishes,

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I'll listen again with headphones. My phone and computer speakers suck. Repost on Just Plain Folks under mp3 forum. Maybe we can get someone to contribute?

@deacon

Hey Carroll Da Only Thing I would canged is head long to hear first Good luck with it good buddy.

Hello Carroll, One of the many things I like about this song is that it can easily be sung by male or female by merely changing one word in verse one line two, girl to boy.  I am curious as to whether or not you are comfortable with the lyric changes?  Once I started putting music to this lyric I was drawn to the vision of uncharted waters in verse one line one, it seemed to set the visual tone for the remainder of the lyric, therefore I tried to follow that mind set with various visual references throughout the lyric for the audience.  Here are the lyric changes as sung in the song:

In Too Deep      Kiphen/Nelson collaboration

I dove in - to uncharted water,
searchin for the girl of my dreams.
In beauty lies - unseen danger,
like you not loving me.

The moment I saw you, I knew right away,
you'd be a hard one to keep.
The moment we kissed, I knew right away,
I was - in too deep.

I was past - the point of return,
first time I looked in your eyes.
I do believe - I should've known better,
cause hungry hearts aren't wise.

The moment I saw you, I knew right away,
you'd be a hard one to keep.
The moment we kissed, I knew right away,
I was - in too deep.

I should've tested the waters,
I should've rode the tide.
Now time will tell, only time will tell,
if we go down or we survive.

(repeat chorus X2)

Best wishes,

Speak soon