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01/12/2019 11:52 am
Verse
The wind is blowing cold today
A hard rains on the way.
There's nothing really needs doing
Not a thing that can't wait.
Chorus
Clear my mind of clutter.
Take some time to breathe.
Sit and watch it raining.
Take some time for me.
Verse
I'll close my eyes chase butterflies
Dream about better days
Forget my troubles for awhile.
Daydream the day away.
Chorus
Clear my mind of clutter
Dream about better days.
Forget my troubles for awile.
Daydream the day away.
Verse
It's a good day for a daydream.
- A great way to pass the time.
It's a good day to take a nap
Or simply drink some wine.
Chorus
Clear my mind of clutter.
Take some time to breathe.
Sit and watch it raining.
Take some time for me.
Verse
It's slow at work and I'm Caught up.
There's no dead lines today.
It's a good day to play hooky.
Daydream the day away.
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Daydream the day away.
carroll kiphen
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03/12/2019 9:30 pm
Hello Carroll,
Great topic, simple and relaxing. Using the hook randomly at the end of some of your verses and some of your choruses seems a bit unusual, but if it works for you that's ok. As I read over your lyric, I began to wonder, even though your hook, (title), is Daydream, might it be interesting to change the lines "Daydream the day away" to "Dream the day away"? Just a thought my friend. Good luck and best wishes,
Speak soon
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Topic starter
03/12/2019 9:34 pm
I thought the dame thing. I shortened the title for who knows why.
carroll kiphen
03/12/2019 9:40 pm
Honestly Carroll, leaving the title as Daydream, then using the line Dream the day away, might appeal to your audience, just depends on how you feel with it.
Speak soon
Music is an international language, say it with a song. deaconmusic4u@gmail.com
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03/12/2019 9:42 pm
I'll look at ot tomorrow. If anybody else has an opinion. Pipe up. Can always. Use more feedback
carroll kiphen
04/12/2019 2:30 am
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04/12/2019 9:59 am
Sometimes you just got to kick back and do nothing .Kinda get a reset.
carroll kiphen
04/12/2019 10:15 am
I daydream all the time....
Did you get a haircut or something, Tony? You look different, but I can't quite put my finger on it.
I may or may not be an enigma
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04/12/2019 10:44 am
Well, I met this cute little gypsey girl.......
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Topic starter
04/12/2019 11:00 am
I don't need crystal ball to see where this is going. Was you mojo rising lol.
carroll kiphen
04/12/2019 11:03 am
Oh, she was sweet alright... and SHAMELESS!!!! ?
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04/12/2019 10:35 pm
At T's age his mojo could turn into an oh no pretty quick
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04/12/2019 10:38 pm
Sadly i know the feeling.
carroll kiphen
04/12/2019 10:52 pm
I'm good once, as I ever was.
Music is an international language, say it with a song. deaconmusic4u@gmail.com
05/12/2019 4:38 am
I've learned to enjoy the "oh no" moments as well... Lol ?
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