Nervous Breakdown - Tune Topics

RE: Nervous Breakdown

Gavin — Sun, 23 Jun 2019 16:09:15 +0000

Thanks Jen. No, I didn't do anything to the vocal. That Auckland drive must have taken it out of you!

RE: Nervous Breakdown

Jenny Stokes — Sun, 23 Jun 2019 08:52:51 +0000

Hey Gavin. I'm probably not a good one to listen to on this one because I didn't have any trouble seeing your meaning in the original so from that perspective, I'm not the person who needs convincing because I already was. Did it need to be changed? imo, no. BUT, I actually like the revision to the chorus. From rhythmical p.o.v. it just flows better with the change. In terms of their clarity of meaning, either works for me.

Did you turn down your vocal in the revised version? I ask because that part where you say "stand in a crowded room and just roar" seems to have a bigger presence in the original. If you didn't change anything, it's probably just a case of me being tired from having driven to and from Auckland today.

RE: Nervous Breakdown

Gavin — Sat, 22 Jun 2019 15:19:52 +0000

On the basis of feedback here and elsewhere, I made two small changes to this song. People didn't seem to be getting that the song wasn't about someone actually having a breakdown, but about someone wishing he was the kind of person who could let out the repressed feelings building up inside him. I changed the last line of verses 2 and 3 from "I won't" to "I know I won't" and Of course I won't." Here are the two versions, with the original one first. If anyone has the time to listen and tell me if the revised version works and sounds OK, I'd appreciate it. The song is only 2 and a half minutes long :)

Original Version

https://soundcloud.com/themysteriousbeings/nervous-breakdown-alternative-version/s-3xOdN

And the revised version

https://soundcloud.com/themysteriousbeings/nervous-breakdown

RE: Nervous Breakdown

JAPOV — Sat, 15 Jun 2019 17:42:40 +0000

I other words, let the music morph into something a bit angrier once you get to "I can't, I won’t"... let us hear you gritting your teeth!!!

RE: Nervous Breakdown

JAPOV — Sat, 15 Jun 2019 15:06:57 +0000

Hmmmm...... but what if you're emphasizing "I can’t, I wont"? Make that the crescendo....

RE: Nervous Breakdown

Gavin — Fri, 14 Jun 2019 12:39:55 +0000

Posted by: JAPOV
OK, I've listened again........ I think I'm getting it. The mood of the music in contrast to the mood of the lyrics is the whole point, right? It's ironic?

In a way. The bouncy melody reflects the kind of guy he is. Smiling through gritted teeth, holding it together, unable to express his true feelings. He wouldn't be the kind of chap to give in to speaking slowly in a minor key. That's kind of the point of "I don't, I won't." He knows he doesn't have a way to let it all out.

Also, I didn't want it to sound whiny :)

RE: Nervous Breakdown

JAPOV — Fri, 14 Jun 2019 04:16:19 +0000

OK, I've listened again........ I think I'm getting it. The mood of the music in contrast to the mood of the lyrics is the whole point, right? It's ironic?

RE: Nervous Breakdown

JAPOV — Thu, 13 Jun 2019 16:46:07 +0000

Posted by: Gavin
Hmmm… not sure how awesome that would turn out LOL.

Perhaps...... But I have absolutely NO doubt it would be inspiration for John-n-I......
And it would still be YOU!

RE: Nervous Breakdown

Gavin — Thu, 13 Jun 2019 12:34:34 +0000

Hmmm… not sure how awesome that would turn out LOL.

RE: Nervous Breakdown

Jenny Stokes — Thu, 13 Jun 2019 05:09:07 +0000

Now THAT would be awesome!