Interesting visuals. The Singer-Character is observing. The Love-Interest Character is observed, shown to my imagination. The short Lines can be very effective in vocal delivery, giving a greater sense of the Singer-Character's emotional involvement, relating his feelings.

VERSE I
(The) Sun's up over blue-eyed sky (poetic) (7 syllables, 7 notes to sing. Sets a pattern to Repeat in other Verses.)

The silvery night, disappears (8)

Into yellow×2 (Instead of X2 why not type it in twice, letting the reader get it the way you intend it?) (3)
Into yellow (This Repetition sets a pattern I would expect to Repeat in other Verses.) (3)

And it reveals the freckles on your skin (I'd delete 'And'. I like the image of the freckles, revealed in the dawn light.) (9)

My darlings earrings, would dance about her shoulders if they could×2 (Here the Singer-Character abandons the direct First-Person address in the previous Line, where he speaks to 'you' with the word 'your', and instead speaks 'about' her, with the word 'her'. I think 'your' would work here to, even leaving 'My darling's earrings' unchanged.) (14? Or should there be 4 Lines, 5-7-3-3? The short Lines can be very effective, read on the page, as poetry, or vocalized.)

(7-8-3-3-9-5-7-3 syllables/notes to sing. Pattern set, expect Repetition in other Verses to match Melody of Verse I.)

CHORUS.
You look like heaven

The way you fit in the leather ('the' leather is abstract. Try 'in your leather'. Let her 'own' it.)

You drive me insane! 
Some days I'm, 

Under the weather.
You make me, 
feel way better. 
When you leave it...
Feels Like Forever (Repeating this Line could emphasize it as the main idea, the Singer-Character's main 'complaint'.)

Feels Like Forever

Feels Like Forever

VERSE II (In Verse I there were 7-8-3-3-9-5-7-3-3 syllables/notes to sing in the Lines. Pattern set, expect Repetition in other Verses to match Melody of Verse I.)
The world keeps spinning , (5  instead of 7 in Verse I Line 1, so a variation in Melody.)

drunk from the (gravity (6) (I'm not sure what is intended here. Is 'drunk from the' intended to Repeat 3X? or is 'gravity' to Repeat? 'Gravity' would Repeat the 3-syllable/note pattern of 'Into yellow' used in Verse I.)

)×3 pulling me down to you (6 instead of 9 in Verse I Line 4, again, altering the Melody the listener 'learned' in Verse I.)

1. 1. It weighs on me heavily (7?) 
      parting ways so suddenly it does (9?).
      But (Delete 'But') I'm taking baby steps, (6?)
      getting over you (5) (Breaking this string out into short Lines like the others would help.)

      (Identical or near-identical Repeat of the number of syllables enables identical/near-identical Repeat of Melody, Structure listeners can relate to.)

      Here are some ideas for a Revised version:
      Feels Like Forever

      VERSE I
      Th sun's up over blue-eyed sky.

      The silvery night, disappears,

      Into yellow.
      Into yellow.

      It reveals the freckles on your skin.

      My darlings earrings,
      would dance about her shoulders,
      if they could,

       

      if they could.

      CHORUS.
      You look like heaven,

      The way you fit in your leather 

      You drive me insane!
      Some days I'm 

      Under the weather!

      You make me feel way better!

      When you leave, it
      Feels Like Forever!

      Feels Like Forever!

       

      Feels Like Forever.

      VERSE II (VI 7-8-3-3-9-5-7-3-3)

      The world keeps spinning (around) (7) .
      (It's making me so) drunk from the (8)
      gravity (3)

       

      gravity

      gravity,

       

      (A world's weight) pulling me down to you (9) 

      It (all) weighs on me,
      heavily (3, Near-Rhyming 'gravity', could work as a Repeat.)
      heavily

      heavily,
      parting ways so suddenly, (7) ('suddenly' could Repeat too.)
      it does .
      (Coda, final Musical Movement)
      I'm taking baby steps,

   2. getting over you.
      over you
   3. over you

@gary-e-andrews

Thank you so much for your feedback , it has govee me Alot to think about. 

About the "drunk" bit of the song , I brought it I to relate 5he nature of the world spinning coz of gravity. So the drunk is like saying like how the world has too much of gravity spinning,you keep my head spinning to , kinda like a metaphor sort of thing

I got that metaphor with gravity, like a person we love, desire, seems to pull us to them. It works. 

@gary-e-andrews

Yeah that's it