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moraamarolaloba
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24/03/2019 1:14 pm  

This song is a well-known topic lately, although it has always been happening, I would say, the fact is that I tried to reflect this story with delicacy and wearing red what cannot be said and giving wings to the innocence of a little girl.
Lately, my songs are ... I do not know, but the fact is that they come to my head so I let them go,
there must be a reason.

She searched in her memory
the innocence
she had
when she was a child
a child
a child

But feels suddenly
lost
between red curtains
Red curtains
Red curtains
Red curtains

She searched inside
the innocence she had
when she was a child
a child
a child

Wondering
what happened
to that little girl
hiding
behind the curtains
hiding
behind the curtains

escaping from the thief
who was looking for the Angel
that was living
among her clothes
that was living
among her clothes

What is innocence
for those
who break it
what is innocence
for those rotten souls ... x2

She searched inside
the innocence
she had
when she was a child
a child
a child

But feels suddenly
lost
between red curtains
Red curtains
Red curtains
Red curtains

What is innocence
for those
who break it
what is innocence

Best regards,

Mora

 

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Gavin
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24/03/2019 6:50 pm  

I found this song very powerful, Mora. In particular, these lines are superb.

escaping from the thief
who was looking for the Angel
that was living
among her clothes

I don't know if you were alluding specifically to a priest "looking for the angel." It doesn't matter if you were or not, those are brilliant lines.

I don't know if this matters, but your pronunciation of curtains is a bit strange.  The stress should be on the first syllable CURtains. I think it would sing better too.

I feel like we sometimes forget to mention Marcus. I think we take him for granted and just assume that he will produce the perfect musical accompaniment. It feels so easy - but I'm sure there is a lot of work behind it.

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Jenny Stokes
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24/03/2019 8:23 pm  

Hello Mora. I am totally stunned by this song. After it finished, I found myself frozen to the chair and speechless for some minutes. Very powerful. It's disturbing, but discretely so, and it's also thought provoking. Listening was a profound experience.

One thought about your pronunciation (which is very good by the way), sing the "i" in "hiding" as you say the "i" in "I am." The "i" is a long vowel, not a short one.

Jen

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John Evans
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24/03/2019 9:19 pm  

Wow Mora I dig this. And I need to disagree with my friends here because I am LOVING the way you pronounce some of the words like curtains and rotten. Yes it may be technically incorrect pronunciation in English but to me it make your singing so interesting. AND those little bits of acoustic guitar are awesome. I should take a page from your book. If I were writing the acoustic guitar for this song I would have totally overdone it. I would not have the restraint to just put in those few but very strategic pieces. Nicely done.

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25/03/2019 11:31 pm  

Hello Mora,

I love this song and the way it was produced - video as well.  I'm with John on your pronunciation, it makes the song much more intriguing.  Thank you for sharing, good luck and best wishes,

Speak soon,

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moraamarolaloba
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26/03/2019 7:04 pm  
Posted by: Gavin

I found this song very powerful, Mora. In particular, these lines are superb.

escaping from the thief
who was looking for the Angel
that was living
among her clothes

I don't know if you were alluding specifically to a priest "looking for the angel." It doesn't matter if you were or not, those are brilliant lines.

I don't know if this matters, but your pronunciation of curtains is a bit strange.  The stress should be on the first syllable CURtains. I think it would sing better too.

I feel like we sometimes forget to mention Marcus. I think we take him for granted and just assume that he will produce the perfect musical accompaniment. It feels so easy - but I'm sure there is a lot of work behind it.

Hi Gavin, thank you for your time.

Yes, I alluded to a priest... 
About my pronunciation... Ouf! It is independent many times of my will, hahaha
And yes, it's true, Marcus's guitar transforms my songs.

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moraamarolaloba
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26/03/2019 7:14 pm  
Posted by: Jenny Stokes

Hello Mora. I am totally stunned by this song. After it finished, I found myself frozen to the chair and speechless for some minutes. Very powerful. It's disturbing, but discretely so, and it's also thought provoking. Listening was a profound experience.

One thought about your pronunciation (which is very good by the way), sing the "i" in "hiding" as you say the "i" in "I am." The "i" is a long vowel, not a short one.

Jen

Hola Jen!

Thank you for your time. I take note of how to pronounce the "i" = the "I" in "hiding".

It is a sad song because it talks about something that continues to happen in many places with the complicity of silence.

I have tried to sing this story of many children with a more abstract perspective and eliminating the morbid but leaving very clear what happens.
I think we are all born with a wonderful light, that of innocence ...
I marveled saying this word !!

Hasta otro día!!!

 

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moraamarolaloba
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26/03/2019 7:23 pm  
Posted by: John Evans

Wow Mora I dig this. And I need to disagree with my friends here because I am LOVING the way you pronounce some of the words like curtains and rotten. Yes it may be technically incorrect pronunciation in English but to me it make your singing so interesting. AND those little bits of acoustic guitar are awesome. I should take a page from your book. If I were writing the acoustic guitar for this song I would have totally overdone it. I would not have the restraint to just put in those few but very strategic pieces. Nicely done.

I see that I'm not going to become famous with my music but with my pronunciation! hahaha
Thank you very much for your words. You're right, Marcus's guitar has a strong presence in my songs. Many times I keep one of his licks in my head and I'm humming it all day.

Mora

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moraamarolaloba
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26/03/2019 7:25 pm  
Posted by: Deacon

Hello Mora,

I love this song and the way it was produced - video as well.  I'm with John on your pronunciation, it makes the song much more intriguing.  Thank you for sharing, good luck and best wishes,

Speak soon,

Hi Deacon.

Thank you very much. You are very kind and yes, we'll speak soon.

Mora

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Gavin
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26/03/2019 7:29 pm  

Mora, here's a thought. I wonder how it would be if you changed the she to he.

escaping from the thief
who was looking for the Angel
that was living
among his clothes

Of course, it's because I'm a guy, but that makes me even more uncomfortable and that translates into an even more powerful impact. It would be even more distinctive too. I don't think there are any songs about that. It would be really hard for a man to sing, but women are mothers and that puts them in the position to sing about this just as powerfully.

It's just a thought. It's great as it is.

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moraamarolaloba
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01/04/2019 12:56 pm  
Posted by: Gavin

Mora, here's a thought. I wonder how it would be if you changed the she to he.

escaping from the thief
who was looking for the Angel
that was living
among his clothes

Of course, it's because I'm a guy, but that makes me even more uncomfortable and that translates into an even more powerful impact. It would be even more distinctive too. I don't think there are any songs about that. It would be really hard for a man to sing, but women are mothers and that puts them in the position to sing about this just as powerfully.

It's just a thought. It's great as it is.

Gavin, you are right, I could have said "he" instead of "she" but if I tell you the truth I did not find the images I would have needed for him to be in the video. Anyway, we all know that this social scourge stains both girls and boys.

 

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Gary E. Andrews
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29/04/2019 11:47 pm  

She searched in her memory (She searches...)
the innocence 
she had 
when she was a child
a child
a child

But feels suddenly (Here she 'feels', instead of 'felt'. So 'searches' could make sense. Happening now. Not past tense.)
lost
between red curtains
Red curtains
Red curtains
Red curtains

She searches inside
the innocence she had 
when she was a child
a child
a child

Wondering
what happened 
to that little girl 
hiding 
behind the curtains
hiding 
behind the curtains

escaping from the thief
who was looking for the Angel (who IS looking...)
that was living ('who' instead of 'that', who is living...)
among her clothes
that was living  (who is living)
among her clothes

What is innocence
for those
who break it
what is innocence
for those rotten souls ... x2

She searches inside 
the innocence 
she had 
when she was a child
a child
a child

But feels suddenly 
lost
between red curtains
Red curtains
Red curtains
Red curtains

What is innocence
for those
who break it
what is innocence

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