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ckiphen
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22/07/2019 11:31 am  

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I robbed a father of his son.

I broke a mother’s heart.

I stole the future from a child.

I left behind deep scars.

Pre chorus

It came as a revelation.

An awakening of my soul.

The light of a new beginning

An adventure to make me whole.

Chorus

Sometimes the truth frees a man.

Sometimes it does him in.

Verse

I fell upon my knees and pleaded lord.

Help this poor sinner change.

I the light of a burning bush

This blind man found his way.

Pre chorus

It came as a revelation.

An awakening of my soul.

The light of a new beginning

An adventure to make me whole.

Chorus

Sometimes the truth frees a man.

Sometimes it does him in.

Verse

I robbed a father of his son.

I broke a mother’s heart.

I stole the future from a child.

I left behind deep scars.

Bridge

I can’t undo my sins.

No one ever can.

But I can die trying.

To be a better man.

Chorus

Sometimes the truth frees a man.

Sometimes it does him in.

 

carroll kiphen


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Penkslyrics
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15/12/2019 12:06 pm  

Another good one, Carroll. Wouldn't change it at all. Regarding the title I would call it Better Man. That will keep the listener thinking a bit more, till the bridge anyway. 


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ckiphen
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15/12/2019 1:40 pm  

Appreciate it thanks.

carroll kiphen


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Deacon
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15/12/2019 10:16 pm  

Hello Carroll, don't you already have a song titled "Better Man"?

Music is an international language, say it with a song. deaconmusic4u@gmail.com


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ckiphen
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15/12/2019 10:22 pm  

Yep sure do. That's why i avoided the title. If i do write 2 with the same title i number them. You made the rough cut on that song. Really like it and wish i could get it produced but quit throwing money at them these days.

carroll kiphen


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Deacon
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15/12/2019 10:31 pm  

Yeh, I understand and wish there was some way to make that happen, I'm just not equipped to do the song justice, but it is a great song.  Best wishes,

Speak soon

Music is an international language, say it with a song. deaconmusic4u@gmail.com


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YrralMallik
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20/02/2020 10:33 am  

Another good title I believe would be Deep Scars.All Da Best my friend.

Larry G. Killam


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YrralMallik
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22/02/2020 12:38 pm  

Best title I think It Came As Revalation.

Larry G. Killam


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